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Sep 12
poem 4 comments challenge: Photo-1 Sunset

On the Dock

I wish I could fly away.
                 Far, far, away.

Away from the hurt, and the pain.
                Away from the give, but never the gain.

Along the border I would walk
               The border of love and hate

The place I call home nevermore.
               The place I was never set free.

Was I even meant to be?
               What if I'm a mistake?

If I can't spread my wings,
               If I can't fly,

What gives me the reason,
             Not to die?


Because here.
On the dock.
 

I.    Am.     Free.

 
Posted: 09.12.18
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  1. Sep 12, 2018

    You took this challenge very literally, which I hadn't expected from anyone. It's definitely a dark piece, but it ends on such a different note - I think that's great. I was happy to see your narrator felt they'd found a place where they could truly be themselves. We all need a place like that, huh?

  1. Sep 12, 2018

    Thank you so much for the kind words. I was feeling kind of down today, and knowing that someone likes what I do makes me smile. :)

    Soda Pop
  1. Sep 12, 2018

    Hi SodaPop,
    I love the structure of your poem and how you really describe these things and hone in with specific detail, even though it is a relatively short poem. I wonder if you could even extend this? I feel with more space, this poem could be even better.
    Good job!

    "hell is empty, and all the demons are here."- William Shakespeare

  1. Sep 12, 2018

    Thank you so much for the advice! I will work on an extension, and I hope that you like it!

    Soda Pop