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12. Hunting. Share your favorite hunting stories, or tell how you feel about hunting. Alternate: The Big Loss. Describe a moment in which your team lost and what happened. Deadline: FRIDAY.

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Friend of a Suicidal

sk8ergrl's picture

You here these stories,
These rumors,

You learn about it,
In school,
At home,

You see it on TV,
In the newspaper,

You don't take it seriously,

Until it happens to someone close to you!

Surgeo Church's picture

Very, very true piece.

Submitted by Surgeo Church on March 14, 2008 - 15:18.

Very, very true piece. Strange because my friend came into school today with a hospital bracelet around her wrist. We asked what happened, she told us she slit her wrists and ended up having to go to the hospital. A couple of my friends cried because of it. She was really depressed yesterday.

But, for advice, commas are used a bit much. I'd take a look at that.

SURGEO CHURCH

miss_literal's picture

yeah, it's so true. (I'm

Submitted by miss_literal on March 14, 2008 - 15:27.

yeah, it's so true. (I'm back SC!) my neighbor killed himself a few years ago, and everybody was so sad cause he was such a sweet kid.
my only advice is that the exclamation point at the end kindof takes some of the feeling out of the poem. it almost seems like you're trying to throw emotion on us. otherwise, great poem, i really liked it a lot

awsmpossum's picture

Overall, I like this, but I

Submitted by awsmpossum on March 14, 2008 - 15:54.

Overall, I like this, but I feel that the exclmation point at the end trivializes it...

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