Due this week

General Writing. Send in your best work – poems, short stories, essays. (Feel free to do it throughout the year, but this gives you a deadline.)
Deadline: Oct. 10.

To submit to Newspaper Series

  • Log in. (Click "Not a YWP member?" to create an account.)

  • Click "create content" and create an ENTRY
  • Fill out "title," "author name, school & grade" and "prompt" boxes.
  • Paste story into "body."
  • Click "Submit." You are done.
    NOTES: Your account email must be accurate; a "blog" entry must be resubmitted as an ENTRY to be considered.

Test

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Submitted by NeonKiwi on March 14, 2008 - 23:27.

Test

By Katelyn Jewell
Westford School, Grade 8

I'm beginning
To care
Less
And
Less
I swear,
This life
Is just a test
And, for once,
I must confess,
I'm failing
(Miserably)

UVM Mentor Feedback

Submitted by kate.maciejowski on March 30, 2008 - 23:22.

Hi Katelyn,

I just love this poem. It's pretty amazing how people of all ages can sometimes feel the same way, and you seem to have capture that feeling of indifference perfectly. I think the rhyme scheme is cute and fits really well with the simple idea behind your poem. Although I think this poem could be left as is and would be fine, if you want to keep working on it, you might think about the ideas behind these tests and what that means. Are they really all that important? What made you give up? How might you change your mind in the future? If you do make changes, I would stress that you keep the tone the same throughout, because it is light and interesting and feels fun to read. Great job! Keep writing.

Kate Maciejowski
UVM Mentor

NeonKiwi's picture

Thanks!

Submitted by NeonKiwi on April 2, 2008 - 16:27.

Thank you so much for commenting and for the advice. I'm glad you like it. Hey, did this get marked as a submission? Neat. Anyway, thank you!
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