Due this week

General Writing. Send in your best work – poems, short stories, essays. (Feel free to do it throughout the year, but this gives you a deadline.)
Deadline: Oct. 10.

To submit to Newspaper Series

  • Log in. (Click "Not a YWP member?" to create an account.)

  • Click "create content" and create an ENTRY
  • Fill out "title," "author name, school & grade" and "prompt" boxes.
  • Paste story into "body."
  • Click "Submit." You are done.
    NOTES: Your account email must be accurate; a "blog" entry must be resubmitted as an ENTRY to be considered.

Snowboarding

Submitted by pejachamo on March 17, 2008 - 09:17.

I love winter. I love snowboarding. Your first carving turns of the season. Going to the mountains, I think about what I would like to accomplish today. Do I want to ride the trails or the terrain park. Maybe I want to ride powder.
Looking down upon huge jumps waiting for your turn to drop. Speeding toward it wind whipping your face. You cant hear anything over the slapping of the air. Weightless flying, nothing else matters. Nothing around you but the snowboard on your feet. Looking down at the ants of people on the ground, staring up at you with utter amazement. Looking down at the landing, seeing where I think I will land. Tail touches first. Rolling over to the nose, bending down, taking the impact. Standing up, ride away. Ride down to your friends, laughing, knowing you just flew over 30 feet, easily. All the fun of snowboarding.

Dude

Submitted by Yeah234 on April 3, 2008 - 08:55.

Did you write this before or after you broke your wrist?

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Nice Job PJ good writing and

Submitted by lokiluver on April 30, 2008 - 11:32.

Nice Job PJ

good writing and very well explained
~*Hannah*~

good job

Submitted by jw12 on April 30, 2008 - 11:40.

good job!!
i am too scared to go off jumps hahah
jordan**

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UVM Mentor Comment

Submitted by slunden on May 7, 2008 - 13:51.

Hey Patrick,

I really like your piece on snowboarding. I'm not a snowboarder myself, but through your words I really got a taste of the experience. I especially enjoyed the middle section, starting with the first "Looking down..." and ending with "...easily." The short sentence fragments really capture each moment of going off the jump, extending and really reveling in what is actually a very short period of time.

While your title certainly gave me an idea of what the piece is about, I think the poem deserves a more exhilarating title...though, again, not being a snowboarder myself, maybe I'm wrong. Also, if I were you, I'd maybe try to cut out the first two sentences, since your description of the experience of snowboarding clearly indicates your love for it. The last sentence is nagging at me also...is there a way to end the piece without breaking the story?

Great job!
Suzanne

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