Where I'm From

Hi Brittney,

I really enjoyed reading your poem. I think you took the prompt "where I'm from" to a more interesting level and that makes this a very personal yet inviting poem. It is often hard to find a way to make something creative when you're working with a prompt, but I think that you were very successful in doing that with this poem. You keep it very simple, but allow the reader little pockets of your life, leaving it up to us to make what we will of it.

Something you might work on could be to expand your two line stanzas with images for the reader to help make sense of it. For instance, you give in your first two lines "I am from a woman / from a man that once were in love" -- you could potentially follow this up with a story that doesn't necessarily explain what you mean by this, but gives the reader a picture in their head to work with. You could use another two lines to create a scene that depicts these two people in some way, so that the reader can feel even closer to the meaning behind your poem. The same could be done for most of the stanzas that follow. I think that providing readers with images to aid in the imagining of the poem makes the experience even better for both the reader and the writer.

Great job with this poem, keep writing!

Kate Maciejowski
UVM Mentor

Hi Brittney, :)

...wow that was deep and it was only twelve lines, i really like this. i also like the responce you got from the UVM Mentor, Kate, that preety good!

only yours, Nikolas Nesci