Anger

Nice...I really like the way that you describe how anger infiltrates you. Good job.

Hi Cora,

I'm really impressed with the raw emotions you put forth in your description of anger. "unusualsuspects" got it right using the word "infiltrates" to describe how you talk about your anger. As I read your poem, I could almost feel anger welling up inside myself because your description was so effective. Or at least I could recall a time when I was angry and similar things happened to me. I think you do a superb job getting down to the cut and dry details of anger.

I think something that might enrich your poem could be to make it a little longer, allowing you to articulate a few more things about anger. You use such good descriptive words that I want more of them. You might wait until the next time you feel really angry and then do a free write to get out all of what you're feeling-- be sure to stick only to emotions and feelings, and not to what is making you angry. Then you could integrate what you jot down in your free write to expand your poem a little more. Thanks for submitting and please continue to write!

Sincerely,

Kate Maciejowski

UVM Mentor

cora your poem rocks! Ha, I was there when you wrote it to- but it looks and sounds so professional on a website. Keep it up, Cora!