Warfare is a Lady

That is beautiful. If your teacher doesn't love it, I will eat my washing machine.

Thank you :)

Just out of curiosity, what did you get from this piece? You can probably tell the lady is just a metaphor, but what do you think it means?

I just want to see if my point was clear to someone besides myself.

I really appreciate the help.

- Anonymous
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"As a child I used to think that 'Anon' was a Greek philosopher, when told otherwise, I lost my first real hero."

Well, I would say that the lady represents the seduction of war, and offers an explanation of why something so destructive appears so attractive to many. In some ways, this reminds me of the sepent in Eden, tempting but, foor lack of a better word, two-faced. Another reference might be to the Snow Queen in Narnia, drawing many to her with honeyed deceit yet truly being so cruel. My interpretation of the "sleep" is ignorance, but more than that- it is very sinister. The ending, with the syringe, is very powerful. One thing I am wondering about is the word peacetime. ???
Though the lady is power-hungry, she IS essentially power- which adds alot to the poem. *applause*
It is a chilling, haunting metaphor!
:)SnowStars

Wow. Yes! That's pretty much exactly what I was aiming for. Of course, different interpretations are great but you kind of just made my day right there...

(I wasn't sure about peacetime either, but I double checked and it can be spelled both with a space or without one.)

Thank you
so
much
for taking the time to help me out.

- Anonymous

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"As a child I used to think that 'Anon' was a Greek philosopher, when told otherwise, I lost my first real hero."

You're
most
definitely
welcome!
I really enjoyed that piece. I am going to print it as soon as I finish this comment! I want to show it to my friend and tape it on my wall.
About "peacetime", do you think it fits?
I am SO impressed.
~SnowStars

Oh, gosh... I'm not even sure what to say to all that praise. Thank you (really).

Here's the definition for peacetime, thanks to Dictionary.com:
1. a time or period of peace

I figured it fit because I was trying to describe the way societies seem to "sleep" through times of relative peace, and even prosperity, showing how ineffective it can be in the long run since we tend to end up fighting again...

But perhaps that doesn't make sense?
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"As a child I used to think that 'Anon' was a Greek philosopher, when told otherwise, I lost my first real hero."

Yes, it's a good idea... but I think many readers will not quite get its nuances- at least not right away. It might flow better if you changed it- or maybe you could remove both "peacetimes" and "fallouts", it would still flow nicely. However, you're the writer, so do whatever fits your intentions. If you say what you want to, readers will feel this and like the piece more.
:)SnowStars

I see what you mean. I think you're right that removing it really wouldn't matter too much, but I may just leave it for rhythm (unless you find it's actually more confusing).

And, by the way, your bit about the readers is very wise. Nice.
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"As a child I used to think that 'Anon' was a Greek philosopher, when told otherwise, I lost my first real hero."

I try :)
It is a little confusing, but what I said about the readers holds. So, of course, it's up to you!

:)

Okay, well, I think I'll give it to my teacher like this, since he knows the topic well. If it's getting other people confused too I might come back tomorrow and edit.

I appreciate your feedback. It's been really helpful.
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"As a child I used to think that 'Anon' was a Greek philosopher, when told otherwise, I lost my first real hero."

You're welcome again, and I appreciate the feedback you've given me as well. You made my day, too! On a random note, there are two of you. Where it says which users are on, you appear twice. It's slightly disconcerting when that happens!

Yeah... you'll find multiple versions of me around a lot, probably.

Lots of different writing going on at the same time.

:)
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"As a child I used to think that 'Anon' was a Greek philosopher, when told otherwise, I lost my first real hero."

Sometimes I appear on there even after I've been logged out for a little while, and I come back without logging in. I have a clone! :)

Yup. YWP is an interesting specimen like that.

Clones are awfully helpful when you're trying accomplish something, I would imagine.
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"As a child I used to think that 'Anon' was a Greek philosopher, when told otherwise, I lost my first real hero."

True, true. Though sometimes quibbles ensue over taking turns in the shower.
:)

hahahaha

They already do in my house...
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"As a child I used to think that 'Anon' was a Greek philosopher, when told otherwise, I lost my first real hero."