Forest

This is beautiful. I love your use of language here. My only possible suggestion is: expand it. You've made me want to find out more about this character, about these woods. Maybe you can make this into a series of poems (or even prose would be quite an interesting challenge). I think you have a lot to work with here, and you might be pleasantly surprised with what you come up with.

Of course, that's my advice and you can take it or leave it; this piece is impressive regardless.

- Anonymous
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"As a child I used to think that 'Anon' was a Greek philosopher, when told otherwise, I lost my first real hero."

Thank you for the advice! You've inspired me; now I want to find out more about her and her woods, too! :)
Often, I don't quite know what I'm writing about- I know very little about this girl, except what I wrote in the poem. I think I will try to write more about her!
~SnowStars

No problemo. Glad to be of service. :)

Half the time I don't even know what I'm writing about either, but it's almost more fun that way. Developing it becomes just as much of an adventure to the writer as it may be to the person who ends up reading it.
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"As a child I used to think that 'Anon' was a Greek philosopher, when told otherwise, I lost my first real hero."

Yes, writing is definitely an adventure. It also is the only way I maintain my sanity! :)

Haha, yeah, same here.

I'm actually currently working on a series of vignettes for English. (okay, was working...) It's really fun to write in different styles just for the heck of it.
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"As a child I used to think that 'Anon' was a Greek philosopher, when told otherwise, I lost my first real hero."

Yes!
I find myself in the unusual position of wanting more English homework; at least more interesting prompts. Our assignments are DEADLY dull, and poison my writer's brain.
Since I started writing on my own more, English class has grown incredibly maddening and frustrating!
hee hee! :)

The same thing happened to me this year! In fact, this current assignment is the most interesting one we've ever gotten (so I'm really excited :P).
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"As a child I used to think that 'Anon' was a Greek philosopher, when told otherwise, I lost my first real hero."

Well, you're certainly rising to the occasion well! Your teacher will be blown out of his chair!

Aw, shucks. Thank you!
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"As a child I used to think that 'Anon' was a Greek philosopher, when told otherwise, I lost my first real hero."

By the way, half of you just left.
And, coincidentally, what grade are you in?
Though I'm kinda a stickler for privacy, that's not too revealing...
Right?
:)SnowStars

I saw that!
And now the rest of me is back!

I'm in 9th today.
But, you know, when I'm feeling especially abstract I might be a little older...
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"As a child I used to think that 'Anon' was a Greek philosopher, when told otherwise, I lost my first real hero."

Well, unfortunately, I am in 8th- otherwise known as a holding tank.
:)

Ah, I'm sorry. I hated 8th grade.

But at least you're almost done.
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"As a child I used to think that 'Anon' was a Greek philosopher, when told otherwise, I lost my first real hero."

Yes, and without YWP I probably wouldn't make it.
It's a very hostile group of people overall.

Yes, I felt the same way.

When you get to high school, do you integrate with other schools? That's always pretty helpful.
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"As a child I used to think that 'Anon' was a Greek philosopher, when told otherwise, I lost my first real hero."

Yes, thank goodness, and I also have some friends a year older who I will see more...

Good!

I liked it so much better once I was OUT of middle school.
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"As a child I used to think that 'Anon' was a Greek philosopher, when told otherwise, I lost my first real hero."