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My Lullaby

Yami_no_Tenshi's picture
Submitted by Yami_no_Tenshi on June 30, 2008 - 17:03.

Cradled in your arms,
My head upon your chest,
I hear your heartbeat,
Strong and steady.
I listen to your breathing,
Slow and deep.
Listening to the rhythm of your heart,
Coupled with your breaths,
It never fails to lull me
Into a deep, peaceful sleep.

offreadin's picture

I don't know how you did it,

Submitted by offreadin on June 30, 2008 - 18:09.

I don't know how you did it, but it feels like your poem mimics the heart beat and the breathing. The long, slow, steady beats. I think its the lack of plosives and harsh sounds. However you did it, it's really spectacular {I'm trying to think of words to use besides awesome].

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Sorry, but...

Submitted by gradster1 on June 30, 2008 - 18:17.

I beg to differ? There are lots of plosives in there...

/gradster(1)/

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offreadin's picture

Chicken soup for subject lines

Submitted by offreadin on June 30, 2008 - 18:24.

Now that I think about it I agree with you. the little air test and all. But I'm trying to figure out what it is. Connotations? The first couple lines have two beat per line but even that's not perfect. What the daggum is it?

Yami_no_Tenshi's picture

To be honest, I didn't

Submitted by Yami_no_Tenshi on June 30, 2008 - 22:13.

To be honest, I didn't really try for anything special *shrugs* I just kinda of wrote what came into my mind. But if it came out that way, all the better!
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