The Most Potent Contraband
You know it's bad when you wake up and it's June.
That means, simply the feel of summer is enough to pull you into a dangerous addiction.
Maybe you already have one, if you do, may not know it. It varies on how far into it you are.
At first, you enjoy it, but then again, it's nothing too deep, it won't kill you, will it?
At second, you enjoy it more, no matter what's going on, it's your guiding light, and it's all you feel.
Bliss.
At third, you need it. You still enjoy it, now more than ever, but you can't exist without it.
It's in you. It's around you. It is you.
You cannot escape it. But then again, you would never want to escape something so amazing.
You eventually lose interest in so many other things, but you still have your light.
At forth, you are deep. So deep, and you never want to let go. Then it hurts you, and it REALLY hurts.
At fifth, you realize what it's done to you, and you need to get away, it betrays and destroys you.
For a while anyways, until you find another one to fall in love with.
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Ew.
I did this quickly, so please don't judge it too harshly. I know it's sloppy.
I actually really like this.
I actually really like this. It doesn't seem sloppy to me, it seems like real thoughts and feelings. And it's raw (in a good way).
Thanks!
Yeah, 'raw' seems like a very fitting word... But I'm worried that the rawness makes it unpolished. I wrote it very quickly. Thanks a lot for your feedback and encouragement!
No problem, and sometimes
No problem, and sometimes it's better to just say how you feel. Because usually a lot of people can relate better to the piece that way.
raw IS a good word for this,
raw IS a good word for this, but I really like it. I think that you could leave it in th is state; it doesn't seem unpolished to me. i like that it's a little bit hazy in the beginnning, and you're not sure what you're saying, and then it becomes clearer as it goes along. it fits the subject of the piece really well, too.
and don't worry about pieces that are quickly done or "sloppy", which this one isn't. my entire blog is like that. =] sometimes it's just good to get it out of your head first.
This was pretty boundless
This was pretty boundless for me... I had the general idea of what I wanted to portray and then the actual words just followed. Thanks for the advice.
=] fun. haha you're welcome.
=] fun. haha you're welcome. merry christmas.
Some girl said that to me
Some girl said that to me downtown last month... I thought Christmas was in December.
Raw writing, I find, is a
Raw writing, I find, is a totally different category to combed-over writing.
Both have their attractions, and both have their negatives, but they're both equally readable.
I sincerely enjoy your writing style. I liked this piece of yours the most.
Thanks much. It was quickly
Thanks much. It was quickly done, but I think I like it too.