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Flags

obscure_one's picture
Submitted by obscure_one on August 26, 2008 - 17:24.

Obscure takes another crack at songwriting... This is really rough and I wrote it in about a half-hour. It's extremely slow and reliant on the guitar part. More like a spoken poem than a song, but I'm going to call it a song anyway. Any suggestions would be immensely welcome. I'm not sure about a podcast as my source of quality vocals/recording has just left for college today...

I wave a flag for
your safe arrival
home
and I wake up everyone
with my screaming
thirst
and I can't find a way
to say all these
things I
think when I'm alone.

'Cause when I'm without you
I
can't find my own way
home
my back aches for your soft
form
and I can't let you go.

And as the space grows
I
want you here
I miss how you smell
miss how you feel
miss how you
breathe...
I grow so weary of
waiting another week
so I
wave a flag for your
safe arrival
here
with me...

Poet_Jessica's picture

i like the spacing of

Submitted by Poet_Jessica on August 26, 2008 - 17:43.

i like the spacing of this.
the end kind of stops abruptly... but the rhyming is really good. it all flows together.
__________________________
"Fall down again Bella?"
"No, Emmett, I punched a werewolf in the face."

obscure_one's picture

Thanks The ending makes more

Submitted by obscure_one on August 27, 2008 - 00:43.

Thanks

The ending makes more sense with the guitar part :)

awsmpossum's picture

I love this song,

Submitted by awsmpossum on August 27, 2008 - 00:06.

I love this song, Obscure.
She's a lucky girl.

obscure_one's picture

Thanks :)

Submitted by obscure_one on August 27, 2008 - 00:43.

Thanks :)

misilover's picture

Oh Obscure, this is so

Submitted by misilover on August 27, 2008 - 07:36.

Oh Obscure, this is so pretty.
You should podcast it.

Usagi's picture

I agree

Submitted by Usagi on August 27, 2008 - 07:50.

I agree with Misilover. Please do; I'd love to hear how it sounds.

obscure_one's picture

I'll see what I can do about

Submitted by obscure_one on August 27, 2008 - 11:05.

I'll see what I can do about recording it. :)

I'd like to podcast it.

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