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The Dog On My Doorstep

Submitted by epentaleri on Fri, 01/16/2009 - 1:15pm

A dog showed up on my doorstep as i was heading out the door for school. I heard a whimper and a whining. On my doorstep, I looked down and saw nothing. Then again I heard the noise. I looked around and saw a little black tail wagging in the snow! The puppy was face down. I went to see. I got my mom. She ran to see what i was talking about.

cool, but what did you do

Submitted by brandon on Sun, 01/18/2009 - 7:27pm.

cool, but what did you do with it?

great hook

Submitted by lmcisaac on Tue, 02/24/2009 - 1:52pm.

Madison,

I really like your opening line - it's a great hook. It really made me want to read more. I'm curious to know what happened next. Why was the puppy face down? What did your mom say? What did you do next?

I really enjoyed reading this. Keep on writin.'

lm