avoidance

Submitted by romner on Fri, 03/12/2010 - 9:54am

I was in gym
I was against him
He threw the ball
It hit the wall
I avoided the dodgeball

i avoid capital letters
it makes my writing betters
my sentences only have so many
i don't write any

Rhyming

Submitted by Tenzley on Sun, 03/14/2010 - 4:51pm.

The beginning line "I was in gym" sets a good scene. The following lines all support good detail while describing a story. I like how you responded to the prompt, but I would have loved to hear more things you avoid. You should try expanded your thoughts. I like the rhyming included to express your avoidance. I also was curious to why your first part had capital letters? Great ideas, keep them going!

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