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Nightmare in the Bay
Free in zero gravity
Floating happily
Hair swaying all about
Ignoring angry shouts
A muscle arm pulls
As strong as a bull
I scream and pout
But the rushing waves
Mute me
Bubbles rise
With each panicked cry-
The life shrinks away
In the nightmare of the bay
Intense Poem
I really liked this piece, I thought it was a very intense subject to write about. You might want to go back and look at your wording and make changes like a "muscled arm" instead of a "muscle arm". I enjoyed all of the words you chose to use in your poem, I thought they were very fitting. You might want to consider adding one more stanza to your poem to make it longer and give more information as to what is happening. I think your piece was really well written though, good job!
A University of Vermont College Mentor