Due this week

General Writing. Send in your best work – poems, short stories, essays. (Feel free to do it throughout the year, but this gives you a deadline.)
Deadline: Oct. 10.

To submit to Newspaper Series

  • Log in. (Click "Not a YWP member?" to create an account.)

  • Click "create content" and create an ENTRY
  • Fill out "title," "author name, school & grade" and "prompt" boxes.
  • Paste story into "body."
  • Click "Submit." You are done.
    NOTES: Your account email must be accurate; a "blog" entry must be resubmitted as an ENTRY to be considered.

The Search For The Shoes

Submitted by fairfield55 on November 15, 2007 - 12:09.

The Search For The Shoes I opened my closet door because I was looking for my shoes. So I bent down and stumbled into a hole. I fell for what seemed like hours. Then I hit the ground with a thud.
I looked to my left and saw a tap dancing monkey in a tutu or a three three. I never can get them straight. Anyway it was still weird. Hold your horses I’m in a forest. Wait I fell into a hole in my closet, landed in a forest with a tap dancing monkey weird. Then came
a zebra dressed in a clown suit. Weirder than that there was an elephant named Dorothy in Polka dotted footie jammies. Weirdest of all they all started tap dancing with the monkey. Once they stopped tap dancing they dressed me up in a kitty suit then we all started tap dancing again except I was dancing with them. Then all the sudden they circled around me and said “bye bye.” then I was back in my closet. But I still did not find my shoes but I was still in my kitty suit and the shoes I was looking for were on my feet. Weird.

NICE STORY I loved it. It

Submitted by fairfield55 on March 27, 2008 - 14:12.

NICE STORY I loved it. It was number 1

UVM Mentor Feedback

Submitted by nataliap on March 29, 2008 - 15:00.

Kimberly,

This story is great! I felt like you were describing a dream. Its so creative! You made me laugh out loud (and I'm sitting in the Burlington Library!) at the part with the monkey in the tutu or three three.

In such a short little story try not to repeat yourself too much. In your last sentence you say "but" and "still" twice. I got a bit confused when you said you didn't find your shoes but then they were on your feet. Did you mean that you didn't find them when you were in the forest? You've got a great story here, keep up the good work!

Thanks for submitting,
Natalia

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