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One Moment...
One day, The earth stood still.
The sun was back from it's winter's journey,
the birds were singing their lively songs,
and I was in your arms.
That day seemed like it lasted forever,
we talked about our lives,
our pains,
and our burdens.
I had shown you a side of me that no one else
knew exsisted.
You were my Prince Charming,
always with the right things to say,
always with the strongest embraces,
always with the most conforting kisses.
You were endearing,
and you took a load of my mind and heart.
Then suddenly,
abruptly,
that moment ended.
We were apart.
Jealousy and anger arose.
We fought,
we fell.
Always together,
never apart.
This time,
you didn't come back.
You left me standing here...
Alone.
No words passed between us,
no glances were exchanged...
This time,
we divided and conqured.
You went along with your life,
and I, mine.
So long life, as it was.
So long happiness,
and gaeity.
...
I will ALWAYS, remember the day, that fateful day,
the earth
stood
still.
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The transformation from start
The transformation from start to end was very smooth. I like the way you phrase certain things, like "we divided and conquered." This rant was more of a story, and I liked that.
Why thank you Intrepid_heart!
Thank you for your kind words :)
I've been out of the YWP community for a while,
but I'm very glad to be back, and writing again.
I feel like the world isn't right until I can document my feelings and actions through writing...
Thanks again :)
Schila
-Schila
"I'll be there..." 2010
welcome back, schila
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=)
Great job! I like how this was written and especially love the ending to it. very powerful! I too haven't been on for a while. The divided and concoured part was definately favorite for me as well!
"please mind the gap" -Mr. Tuna
Wow
So beautiful. That is my only comment.
Writing is not writing if it doesn't come from the heart <3