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for somebody else #2

that writer kiddo's picture
Submitted by that writer kiddo on Wed, 07/06/2011 - 12:17pm

 

i hardly knew you

and yet
i went to you
cried
ranted
poured my heart out
to you
you didn't laugh
or try to pick up the pieces
of my
broken
heart
as others had
(they failed)
you simply
implanted
the simplest of ideas
into my head
you listened to my troubles
and you said
"write"
that was all
on gmail chat
at 12:52 am
you stayed with me
the first poem was the hardest
send
you read it
typed your favorite part
did you know
i was crying?
i read your poem
typed my favorite part
you said
"thanks"
again and again
poem after poem
glance at the clock
3:28 am
we leave
with multiple
"i <3 you"s
think this was
just
one
time
next night
i say
"i have another poem"
you say
"send it"
so i do
again and again
poem after poem
night after night
till 3:28 am
2:07 am
4:13 am
it is our time
our sacred
ritual
we became nocturnal
for each each other
sometimes
we depart early
"i have a headache"
or
"i have to wake up early"
but still
every night
we share our brains
our hopeless loves
fearful dreams
and it feels
so
right.

 

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intrepid_heart's picture

I love this poem. I can

Submitted by intrepid_heart on Wed, 07/06/2011 - 12:51pm.

I love this poem. I can imagine everything just as it happened. My favorite part of your whole story was

you simply
implanted
the simplest of ideas
into my head
you listened to my troubles
and you said
"write"
that was all

because it was just understood, and it opened up everything else. I also like the lack of punctuation, because there are certain parts that could go into either sentence they split. It's really a matter of how you read it and understand it.

Great poem. I hope you continue to "write"

"And as always, innocent like roller coasters."

that writer kiddo's picture

 Thanks so much. Now, the

Submitted by that writer kiddo on Wed, 07/06/2011 - 9:01pm.

 Thanks so much. Now, the "somebody else" jokingly refers to most of my writing as emo, but I never intend to stop writing. Ever.

 --

Let me take you down

because I'm going to

strawberry fields...

nothing is real.

HPlover's picture

This "somebody else" does not

Submitted by HPlover on Mon, 05/28/2012 - 8:55pm.

This "somebody else" does not think your writing is emo. She feels depressed most of her days and doesn't know what to do. "Emo" doesn't come close to what she's feeling. She's still too in love, heartbroken and confused to know what she's doing with her life.

Cunning Linguists With Stunning English

doug.demaio's picture

This is great in so many

Submitted by doug.demaio on Tue, 05/29/2012 - 10:28am.

This is great in so many ways. Thanks to all of you.

If you want to view paradise, simply look around, and you will. Anything you want to... do it. Want to change the world? There's nothing to it.

 

This poem is truly beautiful.

Submitted by somebody_else on Tue, 05/29/2012 - 11:28am.

This poem is truly beautiful. The title grabbed me simply due to my username, but this perfectly describes me and a friend of mine--this ritual of give and take (but mostly give).

Thank you.

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