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and weep.
as ironic as it is, mother Willow
does not like
the shade.
she prefers the sun, because
the yellow light
is a constant
(reminder)
that tells her
she's not as happy
as she
ought to be.
[it gives her
melancholia
a free pass.]
she watches as the people
pass
and only the lines of
creaking benches as old as time
remember to remember.
the only sounds she hears
are the beeping of the walk -
no, stop -
lights and the
trumpet player
who isn't
nearly
as alone in his loneliness
as she is.
she does not
cough or
splutter
on the cigarette smoke as she knows
she should.
she has daytime companions
and she does not let herself
fret (when
they leave her)
because she lives
only on the notion
that more will be back
tomorrow.
the trumpet man goes by
as all the rest, and she
wishes she possessed the
social graces
to compliment him
on his own.
she bends to sweep the floor
and wave goodbye, but she's always been
rather stiff.
she does not pity herself
as her name
might indicate.
she merely
watches
as those around her
look without seeing
and cries out
in the wind
for them to open their eyes.
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Mcwriter...
This is a beautiful poem that evokes many images--I especially like the line "she bends to sweep the floor/and wave goodbye, but she's always been/rather stiff". My only comment is the title: I don't particularly like the period, and would probably opt out of it.
Keep writing!
~Titania
An idea that is not dangerous is unworthy of being called an idea at all. ~Oscar Wilde
Great job. I had to read this
Great job. I had to read this twice, and then chose to read it again. Really beautiful imagery. I wasn't sure about calling the tree "mother willow" though. I thought it would be better to allude to the type of tree in the title, and then let the poem itself be more ambiguous, like the rest of the poem is. I really enjoyed this piece.
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Titania and doug..
Thank you for the feedback.
As far as the title goes, I'm actually rather fond of the period. Don't ask me why, it's just the way I've seen it in my head since the idea came to me.
To the "mother Willow" bit, I think I have to agree with you. However, I am going to keep the "mother", because I want it to be clear that this character, tree or not, is older and wiser, and even stretching as far as she gives life.
Thanks so much to the both of you.
Ta.