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Crossed Your Mind
When the sun comes up
who are you?
And do you like it?
Do you smile?
When the day starts
are you happy?
Are you singing?
Are you mine?
When you're with me
do you feel it?
Is it just me?
Am I blind?
I know you see me
and you're smiling
Are you glad I
crossed your mind?
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Ophelia...
This poem makes me smile! I really like it, and, as always, I like your rhyme schemes: that's what my comment is about, though: the last three stanzas end with either rhymes or slant-rhymes "mine/blind/mind", but the first ending, "smile", doesn't fit into the scheme when you get right down to it. I hesitate to bring it up, though, because it works in the poem overall....I think it's more a matter of which you prefer.
Lovely!
~Titania
An idea that is not dangerous is unworthy of being called an idea at all. ~Oscar Wilde