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Him

Submitted by katniss12 on Tue, 04/17/2012 - 9:33pm

I think of him often

his laughing grin,

is kind words.

always a helping hand to reach

a smile to encourage

 

what is wrong with me?

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Nothing is wrong with you...

Submitted by Nyx on Wed, 04/18/2012 - 9:42am.

Who hasn't been in this situation?

 

This was a very relatable piece. I'd just suggest running it through spell-check though, and perhaps even removing all punctuation from it. I'm just think that the punctuation is slowing this poem down. Maybe consider it?

But I honestly do love the minimalistic nature that it has; great job!