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Not First

Submitted by somebody_else on Fri, 06/15/2012 - 6:57pm

You were not my first kiss,

and I wasn't yours.

You are not my first boyfriend,

and I am not your first girlfriend.

You are, however,

the first person I've trusted as much as I trust my

sister.  You are the first boy who has ever called me

beautiful. You are the first boy who has told me that he

loves me. And, though you are not the first boy I've

held hands with, or

kissed, or

cared for, you are the first who I have had the

courage to

love.

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:)

Submitted by flaming tears on Fri, 06/15/2012 - 7:10pm.

I liked it. I really did. Great job! I like the style, it flows nicely. My only real complaint is that you said that the boy was not your first kiss near the beginning, but then you said that he was near the end.

Erm...

Submitted by somebody_else on Fri, 06/15/2012 - 7:20pm.

Actually, the line says, "and though you are not the first boy I've..."

Thank you, though!

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How to be happy:

Drink water like an alcoholic and give seven hugs per day.

sorry

Submitted by flaming tears on Fri, 06/15/2012 - 7:25pm.

Sorry for the mistake, my mind hates reading correctly.