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2035

Lexie's picture

In the year 2035

If any of us are still alive

Mayan calendar so contrived

That no one would survive

Our current year of 2012

Later it will be on history shelves

So into our future I'm going to delve

In and of itself

Over the next 23 years

We overcome many of our fears

With a lot of hard work and repairs

A place so much better for all of our heirs

Our county has made many changes

Some were unavoidable alterations

Like solar powered stove ranges

And better wireless communications

From the traffic problem at the 5 Corners

And more energy efficient living quarters

To educating an influx of even more foreigners

That came in from every border

Because of true equal opportunity

We've built even stronger communities

All our efforts to recycle weren't  a waste

New items are made and old replaced

Cars no longer use gasoline

And our air quality is purer and clean

We have set a standard to be highly proficient

Instead of doing nothing and being insufficient

We ended hunger and starvation

And even water fluoridation

So much more socially connected

It's amazing who got elected

How did that happen, who was confused?

But overall, things have greatly improved

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doug.demaio's picture

Nice job with the rhyme

Nice job with the rhyme scheme and working in all sorts of different ideas. One line you might want to change is the one that says "all our efforts to recycle wasn't a waste," I would say "weren't a waste." 

Lexie's picture

Thanks

Hi Doug,

 

Thanks for that recommendation.  I am going to make that change.  I was so busy trying to get the basic ideas down, I overlooked the detail.  Thanks!

Our Futures

Hey,

 

I like how you made rhymes with words that don't seem like they would rhyme.  It might be that I think of only cat, hat, bat, that or shells, bells, fells, but to take words like foreigners, communications, and floridation and get those to somehow fit into a rhyme pattern, that is really good.  I like that not everything was better in 2035, since in reality,  it takes forever to get changes made, but your last line of how things have greatly improved, impressed me.

Good job!  I love this one.

Lexie's picture

Thank you

I really appreciate your comments.  I hope everything gets better in the near future, as 2035 is a long way off in many ways.

Thank you for reading and letting me know your thoughts about 2035.

i found my self laughing

the rhyming was amazing. i hope some of these thing happen. love the 5 corners line.

Lexie's picture

5 Corners

Thank you for reading and commenting. I hope even the 5 Corners will embrace change to help with the traffic flow through there at 730 AM and 5 PM.

Lexie's picture

5 Corners

Thank you for reading and commenting. I hope even the 5 Corners will embrace change to help with the traffic flow through there at 730 AM and 5 PM.