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2035
In the year 2035
If any of us are still alive
Mayan calendar so contrived
That no one would survive
Our current year of 2012
Later it will be on history shelves
So into our future I'm going to delve
In and of itself
Over the next 23 years
We overcome many of our fears
With a lot of hard work and repairs
A place so much better for all of our heirs
Our county has made many changes
Some were unavoidable alterations
Like solar powered stove ranges
And better wireless communications
From the traffic problem at the 5 Corners
And more energy efficient living quarters
To educating an influx of even more foreigners
That came in from every border
Because of true equal opportunity
We've built even stronger communities
All our efforts to recycle weren't a waste
New items are made and old replaced
Cars no longer use gasoline
And our air quality is purer and clean
We have set a standard to be highly proficient
Instead of doing nothing and being insufficient
We ended hunger and starvation
And even water fluoridation
So much more socially connected
It's amazing who got elected
How did that happen, who was confused?
But overall, things have greatly improved
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Nice job with the rhyme
Nice job with the rhyme scheme and working in all sorts of different ideas. One line you might want to change is the one that says "all our efforts to recycle wasn't a waste," I would say "weren't a waste."
If you want to view paradise, simply look around, and you will. Anything you want to... do it. Want to change the world? There's nothing to it.
Thanks
Hi Doug,
Thanks for that recommendation. I am going to make that change. I was so busy trying to get the basic ideas down, I overlooked the detail. Thanks!
Our Futures
Hey,
I like how you made rhymes with words that don't seem like they would rhyme. It might be that I think of only cat, hat, bat, that or shells, bells, fells, but to take words like foreigners, communications, and floridation and get those to somehow fit into a rhyme pattern, that is really good. I like that not everything was better in 2035, since in reality, it takes forever to get changes made, but your last line of how things have greatly improved, impressed me.
Good job! I love this one.
Thank you
I really appreciate your comments. I hope everything gets better in the near future, as 2035 is a long way off in many ways.
Thank you for reading and letting me know your thoughts about 2035.
i found my self laughing
the rhyming was amazing. i hope some of these thing happen. love the 5 corners line.
5 Corners
Thank you for reading and commenting. I hope even the 5 Corners will embrace change to help with the traffic flow through there at 730 AM and 5 PM.
5 Corners
Thank you for reading and commenting. I hope even the 5 Corners will embrace change to help with the traffic flow through there at 730 AM and 5 PM.