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Man of Gold

RogueArtist's picture
Submitted by RogueArtist on Wed, 07/25/2012 - 6:04pm

Man of gold,
Man of stone,
Become the smoke,
Hollow the bone.

Heart of lead,
Heart of flame,
Take no prisoners,
Die in shame.

Soul of iron,
Soul of ice,
Love the Devil,
Pay the price.

Blood of hunger,
Blood of hate,
Leave the light,
Bear the weight.

Man of gold,
Man of stone,
Lost your faith,
You are alone.

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alexislynn27's picture

I really like this

Submitted by alexislynn27 on Wed, 07/25/2012 - 6:13pm.

The rhyming scheme is perfect, the message clear, but yet you're able to reflect on it, it flows very nicely, and every line is punctuated and separated beautifully.

Fantastic job on this peice. Keep writing, and I'll be reading!

 

♪♫AlexisLynn♫ 

 La critique est aisée, mais l'art est difficile.

 

Ophelia's picture

Incredible

Submitted by Ophelia on Thu, 07/26/2012 - 11:38am.

 RogueArtist,

This is truly an incredible piece. It's simple, and clear, but so striking at the same time. I keep reading it again and again, and I feel like there's still something left to discover there. Amazing work.

I agree with AlexisTexas -- keep writing!!

~ Ophelia

"For whatever we lose (like a you or a me) / It's always ourselves that we find in the sea"

~ E.E. Cummings