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Falling
on this night
my heart searches
for you
across the rooftops.
soundlessly I drift
through ethereal obsidian
beyond the rooftops.
we are hidden
in this veil of ebony
beneath the stars
ablaze, radiant and nigh
like corundum.
I float to rest
silently
to the rooftops.
and from the rooftops
I see the stars.
the world spirals to abeyance.
and I wonder
if gravity were to liberate me from its hold
as the world overturned,
would I fall
to the stars?
to you?
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speedandsound-
this is stunning, absolutely stunning.
"Would I fall to the stars?" I love this line. It's such a beautiful way to end the piece, and the entire thing flows so nicely.
The only thing that stands out to me might be how you break your lines. I realize that most programs automatically capitalize the beginning of each line, but I think this detracts from the piece. Easy fix, really.
love this!
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