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Submitted by xXVanityInsanityXx on Wed, 09/26/2012 - 11:18am

"Fuck you,"

 

That's all I can think right now. I was there for you. I was always fucking there for you when you needed me. But then he came into your life. He ruined it all. We were best friends. Yeah, were. It's like I don't even know you anymore. You're a stranger.

 

What happened to the girl that would sit with me every day on the bus? The one who always shared a laugh with me? Where did she go? I miss that girl. Honestly, you're not even you anymore. Sure, we still share a couple laughs here and there; but it's just not the same. I miss the old you. I want the old you back.

 

Call me selfish. I don't care. I knew you first. He didn't. How did he become so much more important than me that quickly? Sure, I understand he's your boyfriend. You love him. But I need you too. If you could only take a little bit of your time to remember the wonderful friendship we had. Maybe we could go back to that time. Just for a little while. But I guess not. You're gone now. I guess I'll have to deal with that.

 

 

 

 

I'll always miss the old you.

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Chelsearocksyoursocks's picture

Awesome piece

Submitted by Chelsearocksyou... on Wed, 09/26/2012 - 6:17pm.

Wow, I have felt like this sooo many times, I can really feel your emotions in your writing, I really love this piece, keep writing and tell your friend how you feel, because when I talked to my friend she then listened and we are still best friends to this day, hopefully you and your friend can make up!!

again, great piece, and best of luck with your friend!

 

Keep Writing!!!

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LivviBearr...

Submitted by ggevalt on Thu, 09/27/2012 - 12:50pm.

So this piece encapsulates the anger we often feel about someone who does something we don't like. As a piece of writing, I frankly like the title and the attitude throughout and the sense of betrayal.

But here is our conundrum on this site:

  1. Using the "f-word" is always controversial but I kind of think it fits here. It is a word that is used as intended with the intended effect.
  2. That said, we have younger viewers. How do you think they'll like it? (I am someone who believes you guys see and hear a lot of things we adults don't want to admit you see and hear, but i do want you to at least think about it.)
  3. Not sure the word "f-ing" is needed in the first line. Title does it all. Second use seems repetive.
  4. Now here is the really tough one. This is about and to a specific person. She knows who she is. WHAT IF she were to come onto this site and read this. How would she feel? ... OK, I got that thought. But how would you feel if you came upon a site and saw a rant written about you. How would you feel? ... I think it would be upsetting.

So my thought is that this is a personal rant directed at an individual and that the individual's privacy is a bit infringed (think of people who know her who might read this.) So I might suggest altering it or unpublishing it. Really. And, unfortunately, because it's about one person, we can't consider it for newspaper publication.

But as a piece of writing it is effective. I am glad you shared it. And if you have questions, give me a holler

gg (geoff gevalt, ywp director)

cheers