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Upcoming prompts

12. Hunting. Share your favorite hunting stories, or tell how you feel about hunting. Alternate: The Big Loss. Describe a moment in which your team lost and what happened. Deadline: FRIDAY.

Deadline extended: Future of Vermont Challenge. Get published, win cash. Deadline: FRIDAY.

World

Submitted by Mango on February 10, 2008 - 14:57.

Every snowflake,
Crosses between
My eyes and
Yours,
Every snowflake,

Spreading the distance.

Every snowflake
Falling on your hair
Turns it white,

And I think;
How will our future
Look?
Will your hair be white?
Will my hands be soft?
And smell of lavender?

As the snow tumbles,
down,
Down,
Do
W
N

I realize;

The world is falling down,
My world is falling down,
Our world is falling down,

And like a

Millions

snowflakes

It's making a sheet
Between us,
A white sheet,
A thick sheet

So soon,

I won't see you
At all...

work in progress.

Submitted by Mango on February 10, 2008 - 14:58.

work in progress.

mixedmusic333's picture

I'm liking it Mango! One

Submitted by mixedmusic333 on February 10, 2008 - 15:02.

I'm liking it Mango!

One idea:
When you say
"Like an old man"
it seems a little
random?
I can see that you're tying it
in
to
the future...
but it doesn't fit with
your imagery.

However,
I also can't think of anything
better to put there
at the moment,
so I'll have to post this
and keep thinking
on
it.

ooo...you're

Submitted by Mango on February 10, 2008 - 15:04.

ooo...you're right.....*thinking, thinking*
Maybe...

......

hmmm....

maybe....

Like the
Silky fabric
Of my dress...

...but that's random also...

mixedmusic333's picture

You could just do

Submitted by mixedmusic333 on February 10, 2008 - 15:09.

You could just do this:

Every snowflake
Falling on your hair
Turns it white,
And

I think;
How will our future
Look?
Will your hair be white?
Will my hands be soft?
And smell of lavender?

something like that... maybe.

good idea! thanks so much

Submitted by Mango on February 10, 2008 - 16:38.

good idea! thanks so much MM!

mixedmusic333's picture

Mango, I am a good idea. And

Submitted by mixedmusic333 on February 10, 2008 - 18:42.

Mango, I am a good idea.

And I really like what you've added to this piece.

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