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Fears



If you honestly think about it,

Nobody's truly afraid of tests

They're afraid of failing,

Nobody's actually frightened by the dark

They're frightened of what could be hiding in it,

Just like,

Nobody's really scared of death

They're scared of not living

 
Posted: 07.20.18
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  1. Jul 20, 2018

    I really love the theme of this poem, and the ways that you described different fears. It's truly unique. However, I feel like the ending was a bit anticlimactic. I wonder if you could start out with a person being afraid of tests and ending with death? That way it makes it sound like the fears get stronger and stronger throughout, so the tension builds a bit more. Feel free to take or disregard this comment, it's totally up to you... just an idea. Overall, love the piece and what it stands for. Nice job.

  1. Jul 21, 2018

    This is a beautiful poem---

    Very simple, yet it gets your point across. It's easy to connect to, as most people can relate to the fears you mentioned. I especially like the order in which you mentioned the fears: as the reader progresses throughout the poem, it seems to get deeper and deeper in a way. You began with tests, which people might talk about and experience on any given day, then left off with the more deep-conversational concepts of life and death. Good job!

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