This one's for you, Treblemaker. I basically made it as an explanation for why the main character's mother died. You can take it the way you want to, but I think it has a couple of clues. Tell me how it is! I hope it isn't too awful.
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Long sips of red wine
held between elegant fingers
The scent of blood lingers
A flashing warning sign
Blue eyes, black hair
Terrified swallows
My chest hollows
Breath wafting in the air
Toes curl, lights dim
Sweat glistens
The silence listens
A goblet filled up silver to the brim
A gasp of breath
My body shakes
One last glimpse of past mistakes
It looms, death
I bring the glass to my lips
They round the edge in a featherlight kiss
For a moment, all is bliss
Then death's hands clutch my hips
My lifeline snaps
Eyes roll back
Legs go slack
As she watches our world collapse
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Long sips of red wine
held between elegant fingers
The scent of blood lingers
A flashing warning sign
Blue eyes, black hair
Terrified swallows
My chest hollows
Breath wafting in the air
Toes curl, lights dim
Sweat glistens
The silence listens
A goblet filled up silver to the brim
A gasp of breath
My body shakes
One last glimpse of past mistakes
It looms, death
I bring the glass to my lips
They round the edge in a featherlight kiss
For a moment, all is bliss
Then death's hands clutch my hips
My lifeline snaps
Eyes roll back
Legs go slack
As she watches our world collapse
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Treblemaker
Nov 23, 2020
*applauds* there is no awful in poetry! Wow what a vivid image of this characters last moments and great sensory details! loved the lines 'a gasp of breath/ my body shakes/ one last glimpse of past mistakes' and the line with 'featherlight flight' chilling and honestly very intriguing and pretty, all in one :)
I write because the music of language spoke to me in books and I wanted to make a beautiful noise to answer back ~ Lee Williams.