|Comment author||Comment title||Full comment||Date posted||Reply to|
|Sepheria||I suppose it is! after all it||
I suppose it is! after all it is a memoir ;) Ill be sure to post the rest when i finish!
|05/18/2013 - 19:25||Heart of a Hero|
Wonderful story. So real and... emotional. Great piece, Sepheria. You should write more like this; I like it a lot.
|05/18/2013 - 19:13||Heart of a Hero|
I wrote this at her birthday party, yes. And though I agree that I normally do feel kinda awkard at parties, this was just written for fun.
|05/18/2013 - 17:59||What I read at my friend's 16th birthday party.|
Thanks very much! I'm glad you liked it. I will definitely continue to write.
|05/18/2013 - 16:10||Dear all|
|nijiamaster||This is a great piece. You||
This is a great piece. You really dove deeper into the story and made us feel like we were in the moment where as I barely scratched the surface. I hope this comment and this love will make you continue to write because I really want to read more. I feel honored to have this story sprouted from mine.
|05/18/2013 - 15:58||Dear all|
Thanks you are too (;
|05/18/2013 - 15:12||Especially imperfect|
Maybe that one thing is writing. Your really good, and I don't think people hate you OR use you.
|05/18/2013 - 15:06||Especially imperfect|
|Nicole Faust||Did you write this poem at||
Did you write this poem at the birthday party, or for it? Did your friend actually die, or was it just a feeling. If it was just a feeling, I might be able to relate. Most of the time, when I go to any kind of party, I only go so I don't feel left out, but when I'm there, I feel awkward.
I really like the poem, though. it's very interesting.
|05/18/2013 - 14:30||What I read at my friend's 16th birthday party.|
|Nicole Faust||"What the heck?" Was that||
"What the heck?" Was that aimed at me? I don't get it...
|05/18/2013 - 14:30||Nothing at All|
|Nicole Faust||I really like how you keep||
I really like how you keep saying, "darling." It sort of brings the poem back to a place, then goes off in another direction. I also really like the descriptions. Nice work!
|05/18/2013 - 14:18||Ashes to Ashes [work in progress]|
|Nicole Faust||I think I understand this||
I think I understand this poem, like when you say, falling through my teeth like diamonds, I think that might mean that the words are just pouring out of your mouth. The lines about the leather jacket reflecting makes sense if you think of it as a metaphor, meaning, the way he/she is dressed or holding him/herself reminds you of fire in some way. Also, sometimes faux leather does have a little bit of a reflective/shiny quality to it.
I think this poem is very beautiful, with all the metaphors and similes. Really good work, though I saw that you re=posted an edited and titled version, and I do like that one better. But they are both beautiful.
|05/18/2013 - 14:15||[unfinished and titleless]|
Thank you guys for supporting me in this I just feel that chat is a gift and people are taking it and using it so derail other peoples learning and writing time.
|05/18/2013 - 10:56||It Makes Me Very Upset|
|Samiam||This writing is||
This writing is spectacular!!! I truly want to continue reading and I can't wait until you post the next chapter... you are a very talented writer and I wouldn't be surprised if this became a published book some day! :)
|05/18/2013 - 04:45||Broken People Chapter 1 part 1|
Do whatever your heart thinks is the best wont hurt feelings but do what you think I read yours because I think they are very powerful, exiting , and there you
|05/17/2013 - 21:49||It Makes Me Very Upset|
:o! Thank you! I try and make them interesting. Would you like me to read some of yours?
|05/17/2013 - 21:46||It Makes Me Very Upset|
Exactly, I feel the same way and I loved your stories you wrote very hard core powerful. (;
|05/17/2013 - 20:52||It Makes Me Very Upset|
Exactly! It's one thing if you talk for 5 minutes then turn off chat, but its another to only come on to chat and/or bug people with it.
|05/17/2013 - 20:33||It Makes Me Very Upset|
|SingingSigrid||I really love this. Its||
I really love this. Its short, honest, raw and in a strange way beautiful. Nice work.
|05/17/2013 - 19:28||New|
|SingingSigrid||Thanks for the feedback!||
Thanks for the feedback! Still working on the longer poem and having a terrible time writing! What the heck?? And have fun quoting the line! That really means alot to me. :)
|05/17/2013 - 19:23||Nothing at All|
Enough said. It's more harmful than helpful to those who love writing and need them not to message them every five seconds just to make them irritated.
|05/17/2013 - 15:44||It Makes Me Very Upset|
I feel the same way also. I like to use chat in my free-time to talk AND write, but its not okay if people use it like that. Thanks for putting that out there; it doesn't get said enough.
|05/17/2013 - 14:08||It Makes Me Very Upset|
So true.. I feel the same way. They abuse our writing time which is important to you.
|05/17/2013 - 12:50||It Makes Me Very Upset|
|Samiam||You're welcome! That sounds||
You're welcome! That sounds great! :)
|05/17/2013 - 12:07||Silent Love|
Thank you! I'll post some more as soon as I get some time! I can't wait to check out your work. :)
|05/16/2013 - 23:35||Silent Love|
Ciel in the Sky Mortal,
I am heppy that you got the title, I was not sure if people were going to get it!!!!! Thanks for readin it!
|05/16/2013 - 16:53||A Title With Only 6 Words|