The individual hairs on the wolf give the picture a lifelike appearance that is astounding. I also love the care you put into the petals. It gives the background a blurry look while the foreground and main image stand out. I'm a huge fan of this piece!
--nean_bean
Reply to: The Middle ZoneSaturday, August 24, 2019 - 10:53pm
Comment Author: nean_bean
Hey charvermont!
I really love the ideas that you can convey with so few words. Your piece is to the point and very easy to understand while also being complex enough to have second meanings. Besides this, I love the imagery that you create in your second stanza! It's easy for me to picture the scene you are writing about, and helps me understand your poem that much better! Nice job and great work!
Keep writing :) --nean_bean
Reply to: Shadow LionSaturday, August 24, 2019 - 8:04pm
Comment Author: Treblemaker
Did you draw this?!
that is amazing! be proud of your work, and you have so much talant. the intense gaze of his eyes is breath taking, and I love the extreme light and dark contrast. amazing work
I like this poem a lot. "Summons lightning from the crest / Of the crown- then it spirals down" is probably my favorite line.
Thank you for posting this !
Reply to: BLOODY SMILESaturday, August 24, 2019 - 8:42am
Comment Author: elizabeth.eden
This is beautiful... like you read my mind or heart or wherever these things come from. Thank you and keep it up!
Thanks so much for the welcome and recommendations- I will definitely look into the books you mentioned and appreciate the time you took to comment. I am already loving the YWP community.
First, welcome to Young Writers Project! We're glad that you have joined, and we admire your courage in putting yourself out there with this piece.
As far as the particular dilemma you describe, for me, just speaking from my own experience, when I discovered "positive psychology" I was led to many books by many authors whose perspective helped remove this frozen-on-the-diving board or other basically unproductive feelings. Two books I would recommend are "Find Your Power" by Chris Johnstone, or "You Can Feel Good Again" or "You Can Be Happy No Matter What" by Richard Carlson. There are many other great authors working in this field, and you can find a writer that works for you, but what they all have in common is understanding that positive thoughts lead to positive outcomes, and you actually can control your thoughts, it is a skill you can learn like any other skill.
Hope that is of some help, and again, welcome to YWP!
between the peas and ice cream! what a great line! great work
Reply to: Point of ViewFriday, August 23, 2019 - 10:05am
Comment Author: fire girl
Thank You For This Peaceful Debate, See You Around!
Reply to: Summer DaysThursday, August 22, 2019 - 11:26pm
Comment Author: nean_bean
This is a great poem NAW793!
I really enjoyed your rhymes and the way that you reflected on summer in such a truthful way. I can totally relate to everything you wrote as I too am definitely dreading the start of school :) ... I especially enjoyed the line "The sun is fading away". It's very descriptive and uses beautiful imagery. Perhaps you could include more of that in this poem if you revise? Overall, this is great. Nice job! I look forward to reading more of your work!
--nean_bean
Reply to: Winter PaintThursday, August 22, 2019 - 5:44pm
Comment Author: My Perpetual We...
What a lovely poem! I love the imagery and the feelings you so clearly capture in this beautifully written piece.
Thank you so much! I'm so happy you enjoyed it! :)
Reply to: August 22Thursday, August 22, 2019 - 2:04pm
Comment Author: LadyMidnight
Thank you!!!
Reply to: August 22Thursday, August 22, 2019 - 2:04pm
Comment Author: LadyMidnight
Thank you so much!
Reply to: RainbowsThursday, August 22, 2019 - 1:43pm
Comment Author: Treblemaker
that was definitely a twist, I was not expecting that! I like how each color has multiple emotions and are related to different things but they all tie into the one rainbow. (also rainbow is the symbol of pride so that was clever too) great poem!
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Good response to the challenge!!
I love this so much! The rhyming is excellent, and I love the way it conveys a sense of time running out. Well done!
Hello lemondaydreams!
We love receiving art. This has great flair and creativity! Thanks for posting it, and welcome to YWP!
Abrieart, this is gorgeous!
The individual hairs on the wolf give the picture a lifelike appearance that is astounding. I also love the care you put into the petals. It gives the background a blurry look while the foreground and main image stand out. I'm a huge fan of this piece!
--nean_bean
Hey charvermont!
I really love the ideas that you can convey with so few words. Your piece is to the point and very easy to understand while also being complex enough to have second meanings. Besides this, I love the imagery that you create in your second stanza! It's easy for me to picture the scene you are writing about, and helps me understand your poem that much better! Nice job and great work!
Keep writing :) --nean_bean
Did you draw this?!
that is amazing! be proud of your work, and you have so much talant. the intense gaze of his eyes is breath taking, and I love the extreme light and dark contrast. amazing work
<3
Thank you so much! Your support means more than you know. I’m glad you enjoyed it. :)
I like this poem a lot. "Summons lightning from the crest / Of the crown- then it spirals down" is probably my favorite line.
Thank you for posting this !
This is beautiful... like you read my mind or heart or wherever these things come from. Thank you and keep it up!
I love the simplicity of this piece!
Great! We're glad you're on board!
Thanks so much for the welcome and recommendations- I will definitely look into the books you mentioned and appreciate the time you took to comment. I am already loving the YWP community.
First, welcome to Young Writers Project! We're glad that you have joined, and we admire your courage in putting yourself out there with this piece.
As far as the particular dilemma you describe, for me, just speaking from my own experience, when I discovered "positive psychology" I was led to many books by many authors whose perspective helped remove this frozen-on-the-diving board or other basically unproductive feelings. Two books I would recommend are "Find Your Power" by Chris Johnstone, or "You Can Feel Good Again" or "You Can Be Happy No Matter What" by Richard Carlson. There are many other great authors working in this field, and you can find a writer that works for you, but what they all have in common is understanding that positive thoughts lead to positive outcomes, and you actually can control your thoughts, it is a skill you can learn like any other skill.
Hope that is of some help, and again, welcome to YWP!
Exquisite.
Thank you!!
between the peas and ice cream! what a great line! great work
Thank You For This Peaceful Debate, See You Around!
This is a great poem NAW793!
I really enjoyed your rhymes and the way that you reflected on summer in such a truthful way. I can totally relate to everything you wrote as I too am definitely dreading the start of school :) ... I especially enjoyed the line "The sun is fading away". It's very descriptive and uses beautiful imagery. Perhaps you could include more of that in this poem if you revise? Overall, this is great. Nice job! I look forward to reading more of your work!
--nean_bean
What a lovely poem! I love the imagery and the feelings you so clearly capture in this beautifully written piece.
Thank you so much, at first it felt a little over the top but I just really wanted to express that feeling the way it is.
Thank you so much! I'm so happy you enjoyed it! :)
Thank you!!!
Thank you so much!
that was definitely a twist, I was not expecting that! I like how each color has multiple emotions and are related to different things but they all tie into the one rainbow. (also rainbow is the symbol of pride so that was clever too) great poem!