Reply to: Flash FictionSaturday, December 15, 2018 - 9:32pm
Comment Author: melody22
Great idea! Thank you!
Reply to: Flash FictionSaturday, December 15, 2018 - 8:39pm
Comment Author: LadyMidnight
Hello! I really like this one! Some constructive criticism: Try putting spaces in between the lines and separating the different ideas. It will make it stand out a bit more and have a more powerful impact. For example your first line might look like this:
The day is bright
Full of sunshine.
But there is darkness in the air.
Overall, great job. I really love this poem
Reply to: forest moonSaturday, December 15, 2018 - 8:39pm
Comment Author: melody22
I love how you include the picture. The poem is so amazing, and with the picture it is like unbelievably amazing.
Reply to: EmpoweredSaturday, December 15, 2018 - 4:38pm
J. Scott, this is a good reminder that our algorithms aren't perfect, far from it! I'm going to see if we can fix that. Because I know you are not a new writer. Thanks for pointing this out.
Reply to: BoredomFriday, December 14, 2018 - 10:38am
Comment Author: William
I love positive thoughts and energy. Nice work! Thanks for writing this!
Reply to: I Feel SafeFriday, December 14, 2018 - 10:10am
Comment Author: William
A beautiful piece! So nicely woven together. I especially like the reference to the moon "waiting for her shift as the watcher of the word." So difficult to come up with an original expression about the moon, but you did it!
Reply to: The SnowbuddyFriday, December 14, 2018 - 9:44am
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Great idea! Thank you!
Hello! I really like this one! Some constructive criticism: Try putting spaces in between the lines and separating the different ideas. It will make it stand out a bit more and have a more powerful impact. For example your first line might look like this:
The day is bright
Full of sunshine.
But there is darkness in the air.
Overall, great job. I really love this poem
I love how you include the picture. The poem is so amazing, and with the picture it is like unbelievably amazing.
Thanks so much, I'm glad you liked it!
I also love The Land of Stories and Mr. Lemoncello’s Library! Have you read any other Chris Grabenstein’s books?
This is really beautiful! I love everything about it. Good job!
This is absolutely amazing. You have a gift. Congratulations
Wow. This is so simple but so good. I love it so, so, much. Great job and welcome to YWP!!
I really like this one. The power your character chose was very unique and a great idea on your part. I would love to have that power! Well done.
agreed
I fully and whole heartedly agree with this piece!
notice: this piece was for a school project.
Thank you!
This has such a good message and the poem has great rhythm. I really like it!
thak you very mch I worked really hard on it
This poem is beautiful and delightfully cozy when imagined visually!
J. Scott, this is a good reminder that our algorithms aren't perfect, far from it! I'm going to see if we can fix that. Because I know you are not a new writer. Thanks for pointing this out.
I love positive thoughts and energy. Nice work! Thanks for writing this!
A beautiful piece! So nicely woven together. I especially like the reference to the moon "waiting for her shift as the watcher of the word." So difficult to come up with an original expression about the moon, but you did it!
I just wrote and finished this
Thank you! I'm happy to be back writing :)
thank you
also the crumble tasted really good
thank you, I found I can say exactly what I'm trying to say without using a lot of words and also in the repetation
Thank you!
Thank you so much!