I try to break them where it feels natural unless I'm deliberately being unnatural so it definitely feels weird when you hate a line break but can't tell if the author was being purposeful :P
I like it!! I think some of the earlier details are unnecessary - I like some details but too much draws the reader out of the story. also, I think the title could be altered to just be "marigolds" but that's only a suggestion. but otherwise it's good!
Holly crap, this is fantastic. I love the last line, it is perfect. I love the style you have at the beginning where it feels almost detached, but in a good, dystopian way, and then how it gets more and more scary (at least form my reading point of view) the more you read. You should be really proud of this.
Thank you. I'm a little bit obsessed with Little Women at the moment and I just keep thinking about what life would be like for the girls if they lived today.
I try to break them where it feels natural unless I'm deliberately being unnatural so it definitely feels weird when you hate a line break but can't tell if the author was being purposeful :P
I like it!! I think some of the earlier details are unnecessary - I like some details but too much draws the reader out of the story. also, I think the title could be altered to just be "marigolds" but that's only a suggestion. but otherwise it's good!
this is so beautiful
Holly crap, this is fantastic. I love the last line, it is perfect. I love the style you have at the beginning where it feels almost detached, but in a good, dystopian way, and then how it gets more and more scary (at least form my reading point of view) the more you read. You should be really proud of this.
totally!
Jo is by far my favorite March sister, so I love this!
Thank you. I'm a little bit obsessed with Little Women at the moment and I just keep thinking about what life would be like for the girls if they lived today.
This is really, really good. Wow. I especially love the formatting and word choice. Great job!!!
Having read Little Women, this resonates with me so much!
Thank you so much! It's definitely a more cryptic one, but I think anyone who's ever been fed up with a can get it eventually.