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An absolutely powerful piece here, and one that holds so much truth. Keep writing and making your voice and opinions heard because it does matter and it is important 

This is not America. This is hell. 3 hours ago

Yeah probably very much so

What is left? 8 hours ago

Wow this is really cool!

Okay, I have an idea or two: I kind of think SHADOW could start to resign and be like "okay well now you know who I am so the job is basically done. I'm out." though that does seem a bit out of character, especially if there are a lot more steps written in the handbook, which I'm not sure what they'd be. Actually come to think of it, it could be to threaten/scare JAMES into being good (even though he probably already is good lol) by basically saying "Hey I know all your secrets and flaws, and I will come back to haunt you with them if you don't be a good person" and prove that. Or it could be to (somewhat) control/manipulate JAMES into doing what SHADOW/the handbook want him to do. Then SHADOW would attempt just that (but obviously very clumsily), having very little effect on JAMES though who instead gets impatient and leaves for his game. Neither SHADOW nor REFLECTION can actually stop him (I presume) so they follow him to the tournament and oscillate between trying to regain his attention to cheering him on to giving him unsolicited combat advice/comments to doing dumb silly things. Afterward they find out that JAMES is busy for the rest of the day too which really psyches SHADOW out. Or instead of all that REFLECTION could just lock the bus door before he ever leaves or teleport him into a trapped room or something (because REFLECTION can practically do anything lol) and promises that REFLECTION can alter time so that JAMES wouldn't have to worry. Then REFLECTION could talk about how their kind are actually kinda in trouble and decides that JAMES will be the chosen one because, like, you have to choose someone and it's better to not be picky according to REFLECTION'S ideology (though SHADOW completely disagrees with that because the chosen one has to perfectly match the handbook's description. idk maybe it could already be burned by then lol). Aaand at this point my ideas are probably getting too complicated so just insert the book burn in there somewhere and cut out the rest

Hope it was helpful!

A play... it's not finished, but I want ideas 8 hours ago

Adorable!

Stackable Cats 9 hours ago

Well it’s 50/50 

What is left? 9 hours ago

This is absolutely amazing!  I would love to read your anthology, especially if you keep posting bits of it.

The Sunset 9 hours ago

Love it! You make nature sound as amazing as it should be. I go on walks sometimes when my house gets too noisy, so I can totally relate

On misty moons, I wander free 14 hours ago

I love spring, it feels like everything is coming back to life again

Signs of Spring Haiku 14 hours ago

I'm always like, "What if I said this instead? Or this?" and then"Ugh, why couldn't I think of what to say earlier!?"

If Only... 14 hours ago

That's really nice and heart-warming :)

I wish I could get my sister to walk with me

The Simplicity of the Walk and Talk 14 hours ago