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Apr 12
poem, nonfiction 2 comments challenge: Perfect
CierraMist47

A Body Built for Hugs

That's all I look forward to every single morning.
He may be mostly skin and bones,
But his hugs are beyond compare.
They're perfect.
Whenever he reaches out to me one,
I cherish each step into it.
From the moment we walk towards each other with arms stretched wide,
To when his hands take my shoulders to pull me in close,
And when we fall apart to carry on;
All of it is perfection.
I never get many of them,
But each one feels like it lasts more than it should.
The smell of fabric softener on his cloths,
The way his dirty blond hair is pushed up in the front from him constantly playing with it,
And the way he smiles and laughs all the time makes a bad day perfect again.
His Atlantic eyes dorwn you,
And before you realize it,
You have lost every thought.
He may be a twig, 
And that is surely okay.
All I know is he has a body built for the most perfect hugs.
 
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Posted: 04.12.17
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  1. kalia_b
    Apr 16, 2017

    This is a lovely poem, and it is clear that you really love this person's hugs! I think you included some really nice details about him, and in some cases, could be even more specific - what do his clothes smell like? How do his hugs make you feel? As well you have just a few really small typos that would be really easy to fix. I don't think you need the "ever" after "whenever," the "then" in the 12th line should be "than," and did you mean "surely" rather than "surly" in the second to last line? Awesome job!

    I'm a mentor, so let me know if you have any questions!

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  1. CierraMist47
    Apr 17, 2017

    Thank you for the feedback! I will get to editing this like I intended to! :)

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