A summer sunset, hands clasped
Slows time, even as the sun rushes below the horizon.
Shoreline iridescent rubies and golds.
Glasses clinking, eyes reflecting- blinking in awe.
Zoom out and back behind the beach, marsh, and field.
A green earthy forest. Scent of Christmas in July.
Hand in hand two lovers hold
Two healthy helpings of watermelon
(Overeating it, but don’t we all?)
Observatory glances towards a scarlet toadstool; still in the evening.
Pondering life, or just watching the sky through the netting of leaves above.
Or both.
Fireworks illuminate the sky.
Glitter on the gradient of light.
Shimmer. Dimmer. Dark.
Within the crackles of the fire,
The cracks that expose the light.
Laughter. Happiness.
A summer sun sets.
Posted in response to the challenge Watermelon.
Comments
The fragmentary sentence structure of this piece works so well, developing what feels like just a snapshot or a glimpse into a moment between lovers... There is a scarcity of detail (we do not get a description of this couple eating their watermelon), and yet with this style, it just works, and the reader can fill in the rest of their story however they wish, on this shimmery summer night. Your wordplay (the run-on of words without commas to separate them; "crackles/cracks," etc.) and the circular nature of the piece (ending it with the sunset that opens it) add color and character, and bring it all together.
Thank you so much!
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