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Apr 14
poem 1 comment challenge: Perfect
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It Went Perfect

He picked her up at 6:38
The ‘detour’ made him late
His car stopped three streets short
The tank was ‘missing’ a whole quart.

There was no reservation
The dingy dinner was their ‘salvation’
The waiter dropped their platter
It ‘accidentally’ hit her with a splatter.

They decided to walk through the park
That kid’s snowball ‘missed’ its mark
Starting the long trek back
An old man ‘didn’t mean’ to cough on her with a hack.

Once they reached her house
She ‘totally’ was as quiet as a mouse
They’re never going on another date
They think they’re a match dissuaded by ‘fate.’

My plan worked out great
How could he think that I’d ‘let’ him date
He didn’t even detect
My plan went perfect.

 
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  1. Reid
    Apr 14, 2017

    19kowaju, first, welcome to Young Writers Project! We're so glad you joined us! This piece made me laugh out loud -- the snowball that misses its mark and the dropped platter that hits her with a splatter. Such detail! Such mayhem! But there's mystery here too. The sinister narrator is... his mom? a spurned ex-girlfriend? Great work! This one's headed to the Rutland Herald for May 4.

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