Persephone was tired. Tired of being nothing more than the daughter of a nearly forgotten goddess, of being a sweet innocent nymph, a girl content to frolic in fields under the sun. A damsel who ran from danger and blood. She wanted to be more, more than what others had made her.
Persephone led her attendants into the forest, where only the ugly and bitter things grew. Where the cranberries and crabapples grew. Her mother’s sharp words echoed in her ears, warning her of the dark wood, but she threw aside her mother’s pleading and went further. She gathered the sour things, the fruits cast aside for their terrible taste, left to grow and ripen in the forest. Her maids whispered to her not to, reminding her of her mother’s warning, but still, she pulled them into her arms and devoured them greedily. Her attendants pulled the bounty from her hands, tried to pull her from the forest, but she ripped free from their weak hands. Persephone grabbed at the stones around her feet, and as she pounded them into the flesh of the nymphs, she whispered, softly, in their ears, “You belong to me. You obey only me. You shall do whatever I ask of you, you will have no fear, only obedience.”
Persephone stood in the bitter forest, her white dress stained red with blood, pomegranate seeds tangled in her hair. Her arms bled, the mark the maidens had left her. But she wore them proudly. Shallow scrapes are no match for blunt force.
She stood in silence, watching him approach, the man made of death. He wore a crown of bones, old bones, and a cloak of sadness. His eyes would have driven any mortal mad with despair. He was disease, old age, mental illness finally winning. He was everything that ate away slowly. Everything that killed you so painfully, you felt only relief when it was over.
So when Hades held out his hand, Persephone took it greedily.
Comments
Such an interesting and dark retelling! You give persephone so much more agency in a story which normally lends her very little. Also, your prose is very effective. Vivid. The atmosphere you created with definitely stay with me.
Thank you. I was very nervous to share this as I don't write many short stories and this one is close to my heart.
Thank you for being so kind.
oooo this was so good, especially the last paragraph. Agree with everything YellowS said. What a dark and bold retelling
this was absolutely incredible. your writing style is positively gorgeous and I love the dark twist you added.
This is incredibly impressive - your writing style and imagery is so perfectly beautiful and detailed! Your writing is so well constructed and I love how you portray Persephone's slow change in character by the end of this short work of fiction.
Thank you so much!
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