From the first line of this poem, I was intrigued. "we are doomed to live a life of longing" is extremely relatable yet so complex; I think that is something that this poem shows throughout. Relating ourselves to a ship that will eventually fall to its demise matches the theme perfectly. I really enjoy this metaphor, I wonder how it would look if there were more hints to this metaphor or examples of how we are ships, sprinkled throughout the poem. I enjoy your word choice, using words that are often not found in poems; for example, the word fussed is a word that is not often thought of but can be used to represent many ideas.
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"Without Apples" is this week's featured poem on vtdigger.org, up now in their Life & Culture section! Everyone can check it out now, here! vtdigger.org/2023/10/29/young-writers-project-without-apples
I've always enjoyed reading and writing, but during the height of the pandemic it became more serious for me because it was a way to express my loneliness and frustration; and I had a lot of free time.
Wind. I always go back to wind.
From the first line of this poem, I was intrigued. "we are doomed to live a life of longing" is extremely relatable yet so complex; I think that is something that this poem shows throughout. Relating ourselves to a ship that will eventually fall to its demise matches the theme perfectly. I really enjoy this metaphor, I wonder how it would look if there were more hints to this metaphor or examples of how we are ships, sprinkled throughout the poem. I enjoy your word choice, using words that are often not found in poems; for example, the word fussed is a word that is not often thought of but can be used to represent many ideas.
This is the same person as the I love writing account
Thank you so much!
"The Most Apples Are Just Out of Reach" is this week's featured visual art on vtdigger.org, up now in their Life & Culture section! Everyone can check it out now, here! vtdigger.org/2023/10/29/young-writers-project-without-apples
"Without Apples" is this week's featured poem on vtdigger.org, up now in their Life & Culture section! Everyone can check it out now, here! vtdigger.org/2023/10/29/young-writers-project-without-apples
Whoa, Geri, this one is going to stay with me. Thank you!
I've always enjoyed reading and writing, but during the height of the pandemic it became more serious for me because it was a way to express my loneliness and frustration; and I had a lot of free time.
I feel like I usually go back to the memories I've shared with my family
I always go back to optimism and all the things that bring it to me.