Amazing characters and relationship! I'd think about how these characters can be tested. Like OverTheRainbow said, does Irene's belief in ghosts change? Does something happen that forces these two to take action or react, and if so what could that be? If you brainstorm an event that changes these characters from their normal, you'll have a great lead to dive into how these characters can be tested and go through trials, while learning something about each other, or themselves. Hope this helps!
I just read it and absolutely loved it! You should definitely explore this type of writing and I look forward to reading more like it! A personal opinion is that storytelling through poetry allows for more exploration of themes and abstract ideas using literary devices, while still enjoying a story and I see that in your poem. The emotions of nostalgia and the sadness of parting I felt while enjoying the story of the two 14 year olds was a cool experience and I really loved that about your poem!
And to continue, I hope you know that your poem really has impacted me and made my day loads better and am looking forward to reading more of your poems!
This poem is amazing. I'm feeling this way right now and I keep thinking that no one understands this feeling of loneliness and that further isolated me. But after reading this, I know that I'm not going through this alone and that all of us are in this together and I really needed that reminder. Thank you so much for writing this because people need to hear and know they are not alone in this feeling because that further isolates them.
I definitely went through a similar time a couple summers ago, where I struggled with doing so many things, even getting out of bed. I just wanted to let you know you’re not alone, and I think it is very admirable that you turned your hardship into a piece of writing. That being said, great poem :)
Amazing characters and relationship! I'd think about how these characters can be tested. Like OverTheRainbow said, does Irene's belief in ghosts change? Does something happen that forces these two to take action or react, and if so what could that be? If you brainstorm an event that changes these characters from their normal, you'll have a great lead to dive into how these characters can be tested and go through trials, while learning something about each other, or themselves. Hope this helps!
I'm reading this a little past midnight right after I just finished my book!
I just read it and absolutely loved it! You should definitely explore this type of writing and I look forward to reading more like it! A personal opinion is that storytelling through poetry allows for more exploration of themes and abstract ideas using literary devices, while still enjoying a story and I see that in your poem. The emotions of nostalgia and the sadness of parting I felt while enjoying the story of the two 14 year olds was a cool experience and I really loved that about your poem!
And to continue, I hope you know that your poem really has impacted me and made my day loads better and am looking forward to reading more of your poems!
This poem is amazing. I'm feeling this way right now and I keep thinking that no one understands this feeling of loneliness and that further isolated me. But after reading this, I know that I'm not going through this alone and that all of us are in this together and I really needed that reminder. Thank you so much for writing this because people need to hear and know they are not alone in this feeling because that further isolates them.
These are gorgeous!!
I definitely went through a similar time a couple summers ago, where I struggled with doing so many things, even getting out of bed. I just wanted to let you know you’re not alone, and I think it is very admirable that you turned your hardship into a piece of writing. That being said, great poem :)
I love ur poem!
Oooh yes that would be so cool!
Thank you so much!