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"And all that is left is not even our own memories." that last line especially when taken in conjunction with the first is really intriguing! Its definitely making me think. Is the "green paint" a memory of nature? Is the ivy reclaiming even that? 

Phantom pain 11 months ago

"Droplets flop like a panting salmon" What a line! This whole poem is full to bursting with such textured imagery! 

Just Left of Luhman 16 (My Autumn in Colorado) 11 months ago

talking with my sister

Tiny Write by maelynslavik, September 25 2023 11 months ago

Thank you!

Dance of the Polar Bear 11 months ago

Thank you :) the wording is a bit clunky I know, but I'm glad I got the emotions across!

Misplaced Trust, and What Comes After 11 months ago

you did a really good job blending!

Gummy Bear 11 months ago

All I used was prismacolor colored pencils from art class!

Gummy Bear 11 months ago

Payton, I'm sorry to hear that. Thank you for sharing with us. I can feel the bluster, the turmoil, through your art, and I hope it's able to bring you a measure of comfort. Your work reveals great emotion.

Change in more than a season 11 months ago

Your similes & metaphors, allusions, vocabulary are always unmatched. As are your themes: love, friendship, religion-- you often hit on many all at once. This touched me in a very specific way. Keep doing what you're doing.

Men and Dogs 11 months ago

Ahh, "the boxes are in the corner" has me thinking of the sometimes intentional and sometimes unintentional act of compartmentalization... Right, it sure does feel like thoughts and memories and questions can begin to loom over our shoulders some days, stack up like they would in a stuffy attic full of junk you can't let go of. The last lines of this poem, an open window to escape from, was the perfect image to end on.

The Boxes In The Corner 11 months ago