I don't think you scrambled too many thoughts! Your poem follows a logical flow from when you were young to where you are now, and who you want to be. If you want to draw it all together more succinctly, you could introduce a piece of your last stanza, about wanting to live with no regrets, earlier in the poem, maybe. (P.S. Short girls unite!)
I was reading a lot of poems on YWP and I'm in awe of how so many of you put things, I think of all the time, into words. I tried doing the same here. But, I'm worried I scrambled too many different thoughts all into one. Do you guys have any suggestions on how to make my poem better? Thanks!
I love this idea of wanting to like someone but also not liking certain aspects of them...that you also do like in a way? Idk, it's complicated, but you wrote about it so well! Also I totally relate lol
Congrats, Sparrow!!! That's so fire! Pride events are always spectacular.
Totally relatable on both levels. I struggled a lot with the same thing in middle school and high school. As people mature it starts to minimize, but unfortunately, it's something that doesn't disappear into adulthood. Just know it truly gets better and you deserve the respect of those around you, even outside of your identity. If you need any help with it then shoot me a message and I'll be happy to give advice or something! I'll be manifesting the downfall of those jerks for you. <3
Social Studies is lowkey an underrated subject and it needs to be hyped more. '
I don't think you scrambled too many thoughts! Your poem follows a logical flow from when you were young to where you are now, and who you want to be. If you want to draw it all together more succinctly, you could introduce a piece of your last stanza, about wanting to live with no regrets, earlier in the poem, maybe. (P.S. Short girls unite!)
Love the color contrast between the tree and wall!!
thank you!!
This is simply awesome
Hi Guys! These are my thoughts on life, haha
I was reading a lot of poems on YWP and I'm in awe of how so many of you put things, I think of all the time, into words. I tried doing the same here. But, I'm worried I scrambled too many different thoughts all into one. Do you guys have any suggestions on how to make my poem better? Thanks!
Thank you!
Thank you! It's really confusing lol!
I love this idea of wanting to like someone but also not liking certain aspects of them...that you also do like in a way? Idk, it's complicated, but you wrote about it so well! Also I totally relate lol
I'm new too, hi!
Congrats, Sparrow!!! That's so fire! Pride events are always spectacular.
Totally relatable on both levels. I struggled a lot with the same thing in middle school and high school. As people mature it starts to minimize, but unfortunately, it's something that doesn't disappear into adulthood. Just know it truly gets better and you deserve the respect of those around you, even outside of your identity. If you need any help with it then shoot me a message and I'll be happy to give advice or something! I'll be manifesting the downfall of those jerks for you. <3
Social Studies is lowkey an underrated subject and it needs to be hyped more. '
Hope you have a good day bud!