This is so beautiful!! The descriptions are breathtaking, and I had to read it over twice because of how much I loved it! Also I can't believe you're only 11--this seems like something that could be in an anthology written by adults!! :)
Thank you so much! I really enjoyed writing this piece even though it sort of felt like a confession I wasn't supposed to make. And thanks for noticing the prose style! :D
Your message really resonates with me, because I'm always trying to remind myself that someone else may just be having a bad day and deserve some grace for their words or actions. But you're right: You're not obligated to forget, or forgive (a message that many people preach as virtuous, but is a personal choice, I firmly believe). The set-up of the conversation between prey and predator to communicate that idea was an intelligent and effective format choice.
There's something about this piece that feels like a slap, and your words are cutting. You gave what felt like the ideal amount of detail to fully paint a picture of these two characters, leaving enough room for the reader to make their own interpretations as they may. The run-on style you employ works particularly well here, too.
This is so beautiful!! The descriptions are breathtaking, and I had to read it over twice because of how much I loved it! Also I can't believe you're only 11--this seems like something that could be in an anthology written by adults!! :)
beautiful & hauntingly true. love the line breaks. <3
Thank you so much! I really enjoyed writing this piece even though it sort of felt like a confession I wasn't supposed to make. And thanks for noticing the prose style! :D
Thanks so much! It means a lot to me that you connect with my work!
i read it a month ago!! i really enjoyed it and the concept was cool :)
That's true, it might not be enough but we all have to try. Only then do we have a chance
This is so amazingly cool!
Your message really resonates with me, because I'm always trying to remind myself that someone else may just be having a bad day and deserve some grace for their words or actions. But you're right: You're not obligated to forget, or forgive (a message that many people preach as virtuous, but is a personal choice, I firmly believe). The set-up of the conversation between prey and predator to communicate that idea was an intelligent and effective format choice.
There's something about this piece that feels like a slap, and your words are cutting. You gave what felt like the ideal amount of detail to fully paint a picture of these two characters, leaving enough room for the reader to make their own interpretations as they may. The run-on style you employ works particularly well here, too.
interesting how it works...