Too bad the first thing I thought was "well the ones who have the most power won't ever actually do anything about it because all they care about is money, and saving the planet would be too 'unprofitable' or whatever" (I swear money and greed are causing way too many issues in this world), but maybe there's some good people out there, hopefully
Okay I got ya: How about expanding upon the lines "I like sweaters, jeans, engineering and sports, / but they expect makeup, dresses, and to be a wife who supports"? Like, add in a couple lines expressing jealousy towards the boys, ex: "How come they get to fight / while I have to stay polite? / Can't I have my own cause? / And why do I have to do chores all day / while they go out to run and play? / I didn't choose this loss!"
Hope it was helpful! If you'd like any other kind of feedback, lmk
I can tell, haha. This poem is amazing!
Too bad the first thing I thought was "well the ones who have the most power won't ever actually do anything about it because all they care about is money, and saving the planet would be too 'unprofitable' or whatever" (I swear money and greed are causing way too many issues in this world), but maybe there's some good people out there, hopefully
its so goodddd love ya <3
Noooooooooooo! lol
Nature is always beautiful :))
One day someone else will come,
but for now you can enjoy life on your own :) (It's a lot less stress honestly)
Love the heavyweights analogy btw!
I'm glad you felt inspired to share! I love your clean rhymes in this piece- really great work.
That's sweet :)
Yeah hopefully, fingers crossed haha
<3
Okay I got ya: How about expanding upon the lines "I like sweaters, jeans, engineering and sports, / but they expect makeup, dresses, and to be a wife who supports"? Like, add in a couple lines expressing jealousy towards the boys, ex: "How come they get to fight / while I have to stay polite? / Can't I have my own cause? / And why do I have to do chores all day / while they go out to run and play? / I didn't choose this loss!"
Hope it was helpful! If you'd like any other kind of feedback, lmk