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This is an amazing poem!  Everything is phrased so perfectly, and it helps evoke the meaning.  The truth in it is incredible, as is the writing.

For Every Time 5 months ago

Ikr it was so good!

Life Through Literature 5 months ago

This poem is magnificent! I love the concept and the way you described the feelings was perfection!

Life Through Literature 5 months ago

I'd suggest someone relatable (so, a teenager) who is (or becomes) really skilled at something (without being perfect ofc) but is also flawed and may not even realize it at the beginning. They could also have a disadvantageous background like poverty or mental/physical health issues (if health issues you could also have the character discover that gradually). This would make their wins more exciting as they beat the odds

Tiny Write by riphssmyth, March 13 2025 5 months ago

This was heartbreaking to read, but so good! 

second priority 5 months ago

I feel like to have a longer plot like this you need a strong main character to route for…who would this be?

Tiny Write by riphssmyth, March 13 2025 5 months ago

Yeah favoritism is awful, most especially when it's coming from a parent. Parents are not supposed to pick favorites. That's when comparison kills you the most.

Love the ending btw! You are totally a lot more than who you're compared to, and every child deserves love <3

second priority 5 months ago

Thank you so much!

More Than Just Us 5 months ago

thank you! I know deep down we both will get through this period of burnout!

Tiny Write by Writer1326, March 18 2025 5 months ago

Wow, this is amazing! The rhyming adds a lot!

More Than Just Us 5 months ago