it's super good!! I like the word usage and the vivid emotion beneath the words. I have 2 things for you: maybe try replacing the comma after "far duller" with a period - it'd make the sentences flow nicer and sound less run-on. also, the "Dread" at the end could hit a bit harder if it was un-italicized and lowercase. just my opinions, it's your poem and it's already good, you don't need to change it if you don't want to!
I like it a lot!! the line breaks are rly good and the verbage is well thought out. the use of dashes and ellipses could be fine-tuned a bit more - the dash after "only four more years" feels a bit too quick. other than that it's a super emotional and well written poem, nice job!
…wow. I feel this in my soul. I had a really stable friend group two years ago, but last year, that friend group kinda just split and fell apart. It became really toxic and it was really depressing, and no one cared or took anything seriously anymore. It made me so angry, because everyone claimed to “understand”, but no one actually did. Everyone was so distant and shallow. I hope you find your people soon!
Sometimes I can be like that, but not often. For me I tend to just bottle up my emotions because I've grown up to think no one cares about my feelings, so I just have a hard time regulating my and communicating my emotions sometimes. The advice I would give is confront them about it and let the person know how you feel or move on from that friendship because they may just be tolerating you and you want to have stable, mutual friendships.
it's super good!! I like the word usage and the vivid emotion beneath the words. I have 2 things for you: maybe try replacing the comma after "far duller" with a period - it'd make the sentences flow nicer and sound less run-on. also, the "Dread" at the end could hit a bit harder if it was un-italicized and lowercase. just my opinions, it's your poem and it's already good, you don't need to change it if you don't want to!
I like it a lot!! the line breaks are rly good and the verbage is well thought out. the use of dashes and ellipses could be fine-tuned a bit more - the dash after "only four more years" feels a bit too quick. other than that it's a super emotional and well written poem, nice job!
Thank you! Yeah it can be really hard, but I think I know what I want and where I'm headed...hopefully :)
Yeah, it can be tough. Thanks :)
…wow. I feel this in my soul. I had a really stable friend group two years ago, but last year, that friend group kinda just split and fell apart. It became really toxic and it was really depressing, and no one cared or took anything seriously anymore. It made me so angry, because everyone claimed to “understand”, but no one actually did. Everyone was so distant and shallow. I hope you find your people soon!
I can absolutely agree with this, I'm going through this but via a different angle
this is sooo good!!!
ooh that's a good one!
Thank you! :)
Sometimes I can be like that, but not often. For me I tend to just bottle up my emotions because I've grown up to think no one cares about my feelings, so I just have a hard time regulating my and communicating my emotions sometimes. The advice I would give is confront them about it and let the person know how you feel or move on from that friendship because they may just be tolerating you and you want to have stable, mutual friendships.