Wow, this is some of the most unique frost patterning I've ever seen! I thought it was a flurry at first, not frost at all. I almost see it as a crowded airspace traffic jam of paper airplanes, or confetti!
Huge dino nugget fan. I want this taped up in my dorm room. You encapsulated its essence so beautifully. Also, the shading? Like this is amazing. Love this fun drawing.
First of all, I seriously hope you pursue writing in the future. If not a career, then joining more literary spaces and submitting to other competitions, magazines, etc... When I'm browsing through YWP, I am always drawn to your poems and writing. As a freshman in college who has been writing for years, I wish I wrote like this at your age. Your poems have a certain type of depth that is very impressive to read, along with your impeccable vocabulary and use of formatting. This personally caught my eye because of the interesting format, but the language dominates and cultivates a certain mood that feels indecipherable yet just right. I adore all of the lines, however, "a moment instead, a space, extending effortlessly / where meaning shifts, / alive" is striking. The utilization of imagery is immersive, reminding me of the whole vibe of my present and past poetry club meetings. Your potential is endless. You're doing incredible work. I hope you stay with YWP for a long time.
"And when the wounds open up, he howls at my door / And the moon wanes in sympathy in the sky above." DUDE!!! Bar for bar, this poem is beautiful. It is so striking, and the progression throughout the poem emphasizes a certain type of love for the wolves who sit outside our doors. The ending switch from wolf to dog is powerful. From primal to domestic. This is a wonderful tribute to your father. I love this. Keep up the great work!
I'm assuming this poem/story is a reflection of the bible, and if not, it definitely shows parallels. Having the idea that the first two people to be created were writers/creators. I loved the storyline and how it wrapped up in the last few sentences, it felt very well-rounded and particular in plot. My favorite line might be, "Nothing, not the Nothing but just nothing, came from the dirt." I think in the future you should come back to this and revise or add some parts. I would love to see it go further if you choose to expand it. Great job, as always!
First of all, this is really awesome that you are taking the initiative! This can help a lot in the future with work/college applications if you plan to pursue higher education. Secondly, I totally resonate with this. Organizing clubs is a challenge. I suggest that you ask your principal (or whoever monitors that if they do) if you are allowed to make and put up some flyers. That's also a lot of work, however, the main goal for now is exposure. If that doesn't work then ask other teachers to tell their classes about it! Most of my teachers were chill about it and posted something to their class page or their bulletin boards. As to people not responding, it happens often. I'm not saying you should get used to it, but communication in clubs is especially hard in middle/high school, even in college. You could make a GroupMe to help get out announcements for the group, too! Totally free and easy! It also might benefit you to provide a plan for a chaperone teacher if you haven't already. Hope this helps! Good luck, friend! If you need any help let us know!
Oh, good idea! The only thing is I'm trying to control who gets in. I'm thinking maybe a screening process like audition pieces, just quick writing blurbs maybe so I can decide - I don't know. Thanks for your suggestion!
Wow, this is some of the most unique frost patterning I've ever seen! I thought it was a flurry at first, not frost at all. I almost see it as a crowded airspace traffic jam of paper airplanes, or confetti!
Huge dino nugget fan. I want this taped up in my dorm room. You encapsulated its essence so beautifully. Also, the shading? Like this is amazing. Love this fun drawing.
As a Chowder fan, I appreciate the subtle reference. Great take on this challenge!
First of all, I seriously hope you pursue writing in the future. If not a career, then joining more literary spaces and submitting to other competitions, magazines, etc... When I'm browsing through YWP, I am always drawn to your poems and writing. As a freshman in college who has been writing for years, I wish I wrote like this at your age. Your poems have a certain type of depth that is very impressive to read, along with your impeccable vocabulary and use of formatting. This personally caught my eye because of the interesting format, but the language dominates and cultivates a certain mood that feels indecipherable yet just right. I adore all of the lines, however, "a moment instead, a space, extending effortlessly / where meaning shifts, / alive" is striking. The utilization of imagery is immersive, reminding me of the whole vibe of my present and past poetry club meetings. Your potential is endless. You're doing incredible work. I hope you stay with YWP for a long time.
"And when the wounds open up, he howls at my door / And the moon wanes in sympathy in the sky above." DUDE!!! Bar for bar, this poem is beautiful. It is so striking, and the progression throughout the poem emphasizes a certain type of love for the wolves who sit outside our doors. The ending switch from wolf to dog is powerful. From primal to domestic. This is a wonderful tribute to your father. I love this. Keep up the great work!
I'm assuming this poem/story is a reflection of the bible, and if not, it definitely shows parallels. Having the idea that the first two people to be created were writers/creators. I loved the storyline and how it wrapped up in the last few sentences, it felt very well-rounded and particular in plot. My favorite line might be, "Nothing, not the Nothing but just nothing, came from the dirt." I think in the future you should come back to this and revise or add some parts. I would love to see it go further if you choose to expand it. Great job, as always!
First of all, this is really awesome that you are taking the initiative! This can help a lot in the future with work/college applications if you plan to pursue higher education. Secondly, I totally resonate with this. Organizing clubs is a challenge. I suggest that you ask your principal (or whoever monitors that if they do) if you are allowed to make and put up some flyers. That's also a lot of work, however, the main goal for now is exposure. If that doesn't work then ask other teachers to tell their classes about it! Most of my teachers were chill about it and posted something to their class page or their bulletin boards. As to people not responding, it happens often. I'm not saying you should get used to it, but communication in clubs is especially hard in middle/high school, even in college. You could make a GroupMe to help get out announcements for the group, too! Totally free and easy! It also might benefit you to provide a plan for a chaperone teacher if you haven't already.
Hope this helps! Good luck, friend! If you need any help let us know!
Oh, good idea! The only thing is I'm trying to control who gets in. I'm thinking maybe a screening process like audition pieces, just quick writing blurbs maybe so I can decide - I don't know. Thanks for your suggestion!
No problem!
Does your school do announcements in the morning? If so, it might be worthwhile to try to get an announcement for it.