Thank you for your feedback! I'm so glad you enjoyed it! I wanted to end the story in a way that was striking and made the reader think about the damage that was done.
Your story captured me every step of the way, and it was perfect: just as I got comfortable with something, it was changed, which may not sound good but it actually was. The ending too is so sad but true and needed to happen.
I like them too!! I do a thing with my friends a lot when we're bored in class - they give me 3 random words and I write them a short poem. it works super well for writer's block and I love walking through the hallways and seeing my poems taped up in people's lockers :D here's one if you want it: Menu. Mist. Defendant. Fortune. Breath.
yeah I agree with bumblebea & twoblueviolets, try having your MC kind of montage through some moments where he was being either obviously horrible (audience anger at a good read moment!) or more subtly bad (realization). hope your writing goes well!
I loved that book too! The different character perspectives made the book very captivating.
Awesome! That’s so cool!!!
Do you have any suggestions on how to make it better?
Thank you for your feedback! I'm so glad you enjoyed it! I wanted to end the story in a way that was striking and made the reader think about the damage that was done.
Thank you!!
I really love this! The words are so careful and true, and I was enraptured so quickly!
That's so fun! Thanks!
Your story captured me every step of the way, and it was perfect: just as I got comfortable with something, it was changed, which may not sound good but it actually was. The ending too is so sad but true and needed to happen.
I like them too!! I do a thing with my friends a lot when we're bored in class - they give me 3 random words and I write them a short poem. it works super well for writer's block and I love walking through the hallways and seeing my poems taped up in people's lockers :D here's one if you want it: Menu. Mist. Defendant. Fortune. Breath.
yeah I agree with bumblebea & twoblueviolets, try having your MC kind of montage through some moments where he was being either obviously horrible (audience anger at a good read moment!) or more subtly bad (realization). hope your writing goes well!