This glimpse of love is a sweet one, but not at all saccharine -- just right. I could conjure up each image with ease. Difficult not to be a little cliche sometimes when talking about things like the night sky, but chipped nail polish being compared to a constellation is my favorite simile of recent date. Smart to wrap up referencing the lipstick you opened the poem with!
Waiting, waiting, waiting... that felt like all we were doing yesterday! This so well captures that feeling of anticipation, and gives us so many of those funny little observations we tend to make and those impatient little actions we tend to take to distract ourselves while we wait for the climax of an event to unfold. I hope your experience was not too cloudy yesterday!
Oh goodness I love this poem! I wrote one like it once but this is just so much better. I am also definitely from 'lighting candles for eight days in a row and watching them melt all night long.' Happy almost-Passover to all the other people celebrating (including me)!
This writing is one of the best I've seen so far. The raw emotion and slight uncertainty really show when I read this. I also find it very relatable, as I too sometimes feel like I'm the only one existing, or breathing. Then all of a sudden, in just one blink of an eye I'm back to having a conversation with an old friend or doing homework.
So thank you for sharing this, you are certainly going somewhere with your writing in the future! <3
I can hear her voice as I read. Makes me want to stand beside her. Amazing.
I am reading one called "Paint Me Like I Am". It is incredible! It is all written by teenagers I think!
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beautiful. i especially love the line 'her pale lips remembering cinnamon warmth.'
The colors along the water are magnificent! What was the experience like, this time of year?
This glimpse of love is a sweet one, but not at all saccharine -- just right. I could conjure up each image with ease. Difficult not to be a little cliche sometimes when talking about things like the night sky, but chipped nail polish being compared to a constellation is my favorite simile of recent date. Smart to wrap up referencing the lipstick you opened the poem with!
Waiting, waiting, waiting... that felt like all we were doing yesterday! This so well captures that feeling of anticipation, and gives us so many of those funny little observations we tend to make and those impatient little actions we tend to take to distract ourselves while we wait for the climax of an event to unfold. I hope your experience was not too cloudy yesterday!
Thank you! Happy almost-Passover to you too!
Oh goodness I love this poem! I wrote one like it once but this is just so much better. I am also definitely from 'lighting candles for eight days in a row and watching them melt all night long.' Happy almost-Passover to all the other people celebrating (including me)!
This writing is one of the best I've seen so far. The raw emotion and slight uncertainty really show when I read this. I also find it very relatable, as I too sometimes feel like I'm the only one existing, or breathing. Then all of a sudden, in just one blink of an eye I'm back to having a conversation with an old friend or doing homework.
So thank you for sharing this, you are certainly going somewhere with your writing in the future! <3