I try to break them where it feels natural unless I'm deliberately being unnatural so it definitely feels weird when you hate a line break but can't tell if the author was being purposeful :P
I like it!! I think some of the earlier details are unnecessary - I like some details but too much draws the reader out of the story. also, I think the title could be altered to just be "marigolds" but that's only a suggestion. but otherwise it's good!
Holly crap, this is fantastic. I love the last line, it is perfect. I love the style you have at the beginning where it feels almost detached, but in a good, dystopian way, and then how it gets more and more scary (at least form my reading point of view) the more you read. You should be really proud of this.
This hit me hard
Its beautiful
I liked getting new shoes, I just hated getting rid of the old ones lol thank you!!
I love this so much! I hated getting new shoes as a little kid
thank you so very much!!
This is an absolutely wonderful poem, I love it so very much
I try to break them where it feels natural unless I'm deliberately being unnatural so it definitely feels weird when you hate a line break but can't tell if the author was being purposeful :P
I like it!! I think some of the earlier details are unnecessary - I like some details but too much draws the reader out of the story. also, I think the title could be altered to just be "marigolds" but that's only a suggestion. but otherwise it's good!
this is so beautiful
Holly crap, this is fantastic. I love the last line, it is perfect. I love the style you have at the beginning where it feels almost detached, but in a good, dystopian way, and then how it gets more and more scary (at least form my reading point of view) the more you read. You should be really proud of this.
totally!